Hello! I am so sorry that it took me this long to get to your story, I was having unanticipated Internet troubles, but anyway, I'm here now! :)
Honestly I've had my eye on this story for a while but never quite got to checking it out. Now I can't believe it took me this long, since this is an absolutely enthralling first chapter. So prepare for a long review of singing this story's praises!
First of all I'm really impressed and excited that you're writing about WW2, which is such a diverse, tragic and complicated subject that can be told from so many angles. I can tell you've worked very hard at researching for this, and the fine attention to detail really comes across. I absolutely love how you've incorporated the wizarding world into the Muggle political situation, both on the larger scale in Jean's section regarding wizarding involvement and justice, but also on a smaller scale, like waiting for the siren to Apparate, and Simon dropping his wand and hoping to get it back. It's extremely interesting to imagine how WW2 would have affected wizards, especially in Nazi-occupied countries, like if the Nazis would have known about them, and if they would have resisted and fought like your characters seem to be doing.
Ah, the characters. I quite like the fragmented style of the prologue, and how each character's situation and personality details are subtly and smoothly introduced. Camille's section gave me chills, it was simple yet poignant, and set the hardened tone for the rest of the chapter. I like the Delacour connection with Astrid- that's very clever, and a nice way to tie in the HP canon.
Simon's section is so heartbreaking. I actually just visited a former concentration camp a few days ago, so mapping your story onto that experience was extra moving and upsetting. I'm very curious of what will happen to him, and even more so how he allowed himself to be captured in the first place. I'm also wondering if there are any wizards among the Nazis and/or guards and police, or if the worlds are mostly separate. I'm guessing Simon is Muggleborn, but either way his story and context perhaps intrigues me the most.
The only concern I have is that there were a lot of OCs introduced at once, but I think I've gotten them straight in my head, more or less. I think as the story goes on and I get more accustomed to their individual traits it will become clearer as well.
Overall this is such an intriguing beginning to your story, and I'm completely smitten. The concept is exciting and important, the characterization strong, and your writing style is both clear and beautiful. I'm so excited to read on! :)
Thank you so much for the swap! :)
Author's Response: Ack, I can't believe I've taken so long to respond... So, you see, no need to apologise about the lateness -- we're even.
First of all, I think the fact that you'd had your eye on this story for some time is the biggest compliment you could pay me.
The involvement of magic throughout time has always been something I felt JK hadn't dwelled on very much, and this story sort of sprouted from a series of unrelated thoughts at two in the morning (like most ideas, apparently). I'm glad you like it!
Simon's section was the hardest one to write, and though I'll come across as a heaartless creature I was aiming for it being heartbreaking. Even though I've visited a camp and read books about what happened (and seen videos from the time, which is not a pleasant experience), I keep not understanding how such a thing could have happened -- or, to be more specific, how people could let it happen. Your question about his arrest is touched on in chapter four (which you now know), and I will also tell you that yes, unfortunately there were wizards amongst the Nazis as well.
Wow, this turned out to be insanely long! Thank you so much for the review :)