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Review:marauder5 says:
So, I saw on the forums that today is your birthday and decided to drop by and give you a little birthday present - in other words, a review. I also want to wish you Happy Birthday, of course, and I hope you'll have a lovely day with lovely people, etc.

This story was so sweet! All we really know about Muggle-borns getting into Hogwarts is that someone comes over to them to explain, and I really enjoyed reading your take on it! It's interesting to imagine how it might go down.

You've captured Hermione so well in this! I love the fact that she, despite those strange things having happened to her, doesn't accept the existence of magic right away. It's very true to her character, because she is such a logical person, and magic is about as far from logic as you can get. Also, I loved how much of a bookworm she was already. The fact that one of her magic performances during childhood was saving a book from the rain, haha! ;)

The fact that Dedalus Diggle was the one to visit them was great as well! I liked his comment about Justin Finch-Fletchley, it made me laugh :D

Another interesting thing was the fact that Hermione's parents hadn't seen that much of her magic. It must be even more shocking for them than for her. I think the story about the swimming pool was my favourite flashback, by the way, and how the Muggles blamed it on the draining system. Brilliant!

I did notice a few typos, so I thought I'd point them out for you:

"her parents went dentists" - it should be 'were' instead of went
"All of the other pupils had races" - should be 'raced'
"Hermione came to the conclusion that he hasn't actually" - he 'hadn't' actually..
"Was it her that had done it?" - was it her 'who' had done it
"Hermione's had sent her to bed" - the word 'parents' is missing here, I presume?
"Dedalus spent another or so with the family" - another case of a missing word; maybe he spent another 'hour' or so with them?

All in all, I think that you've done a really good job on this one! Happy birthday again! :D

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you do much for the birthday review, it was very sweet of you :)

It means a lot to read that you think I've captured Hermione's personality, it's something I work very hard to do so I really appreciate the compliment!

Thank you so much for pointing out the typos, admittedly I didn't check this one over before posting, bad author! I'll go back and edit them :)

Thank you again for the lovely review and the birthday wishes xx


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