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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
I have to admit that at first I wondered who R.L. was, because he was so overshadowed by Bellatrix that I forgot he even existed! So it's great that you focus on him here and develop him into a real character.

It's almost always assumed that their marriage was loveless, so it was refreshing to read that he loved her. I love his reasons for loving her: "Anyone who met her would know that once she devoted herself to something, she went for it whole-heartedly."

You do a very good job of showing how lost he is without her. I thought his train of thought became a little repetitive toward the end: "His world was crumbling around him. But his world was gone, really. Because his world was Bellatrix," but this makes sense as it parallels his aimless physical path through the forest.

I really like where you end it: he's apparently made a decision but hasn't carried It out, yet. It's a bit chilling, as was the ending of the first chapter but in a different way.

The story as a whole feels complete, and yet think there's room for you to write more if you're struck with more ideas. :) Great job overall!

Author's Response: I agree, Rodolphus is really a forgotten character, which was why it was so much fun to write about him!

I loved playing on that assumption, because while it's clear that Bellatrix loves Voldemort, we really know nothing about Rodolphus's feelings.

Haha, yes, Bellatrix's devotion is really one of her only redeeming qualities, so I definitely had to zero in on it!

I'm glad you think the story rounded out well, and I may very well go back and add more chapters later on, if I ever get another idea! Thanks for the review!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)


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