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Review:patronus_charm says:
Sorry it took me a while to get to this, I got lost in graphic making :P

I think you showed Riddleís interactions with his friends really well. It was almost as if he was observing them and not being a part of them. He couldnít relate to their talk about Merrythought as it was probably too inconsequential to him and he was obsessed with the hat and you showed the difference between them really well and that was really great.

Another thing I really liked was the sorting hatís song. Thereís a reason why I make my characters zone out of the sorting and itís due to my lack of song writing skills. However, you wrote it really well and you drew upon the influences of each house, so that was really great. Iím always really impressed when writers can write a good sorting hat song!

I really liked how you showed others viewed him as it was comparatively different to what the reader is seeing him as regardless of what he does later on. On the one hand heís the schoolís darling and can do no wrong, and then thereís reader seeing this boy taking over this by force, I suppose, and makes him want to get hold of the hat no matter. I think itís the force which is most shocking as itís not letting him think of anything else.

The insight to Dippetís thoughts was also great. It showed how naÔve people were, and not naÔve in another respect as they really were taken under the spell of Riddle. It was also great as it provided something more light hearted to Riddleís thoughts, and I liked the mention towards Bilius Weasley as Iíve always wanted to learn more about this mad Weasley.

The idea of personifying the hat even more than usual and making it able to actually have a conversation with Riddle and able to repel his mental intrusion was great. I really enjoyed the history of Salazar and Godric as those two have always interested me, as itís strange to think that a friendship as strong as theirs could have been broken forever. But I suppose the issue of blood really is a dividing one.

Ah and Godric killed Salazar! I didnít see that coming but I liked it. People usually see Gryffindors as almighty people who do no wrong but I like the idea of him being a bad person. Then the idea of the hat being a horcrux was also really unexpected but fitting at the same time. I never saw that coming, and it was a really great one-shot! Thanks for the swop ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hola! I'm glad you enjoyed the story, and especially Riddle's characterization. I really enjoyed writing him and imagining what he would have been like as a teen. The contrasts between his inner and outer selves were especially fun to play around with! :P

I'm so happy you liked the song! It actually came pretty easily, which is surprising since I'm terrible at poetry, but I'm glad it came across okay. It's hard to get it right, especially with all the rhyming.

I'm glad you liked the references to other characters, and I imagined Dippet as being this old guy who is sick of students and can't be bothered with investigating them. I'd love to learn more about Bilius as well, he just sounds so awesome.

I'm so happy you liked the hat being a Horcrux, and the story of the founders. It came a little out of the depths of my imagination, but I'm happy to hear it came across alright and seemed reasonable.

Thank you so much for this really thoughtful review, and for the swap! :D


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