Hi, I'm here for your requested review! :)
I really liked this, thank you for requesting it! I'm usually pretty iffy about vampire fics, but you did a really good job of tying this into the Potterverse and making Lucy as a character very believable and compelling-in a crazy sort of way, of course. It does remind me a little of the Cassandra Clare books, which I love, especially with the characterization of vampires.
Okay, so first of all I think the story flowed really well. I can really imagine demonic Lucy keeping vigil by Hugo's body and waiting for him to wake up, while these thoughts are pouring around in her head. I liked how she came to the conclusion about the silver lining at the end, showing how her opinions and thought process changed throughout the story- it was very concisely and effectively written! The little hints and mentions of Hugo's body beginning to twitch and stir were so great- at first I thought she had killed him, in fact.
I really enjoyed the Weasley family dynamics you set up as well, and you really gave the impression of a whole life lived together in the course of a short chapter. I felt bad for Lucy, always being the outsider, and can imagine her bitterness. Even though Hugo was nicer to her than Lily, he wasn't quite nice enough, and this gives her a sort of morbid satisfaction as he could percieve her pain but not help her in the past. I loved her silver lining- that he'll know what it's like to be isolated - and also got the sense she's pleased that he'll have to stick with her now when he tended to leave her before. The "darling" at the end added just the right about of creepiness which suggest dear Lucy is slipping off the deep end.
I loved Claudine as well, she's just this high-profile, irritated vampire called in for damage control. It's interesting how she's upset that there are more vamps out there. The Muggle cell phone, and fact that vampires lose their magic, was a great detail.
Another great line was her human assesment of how confident people are, and vampire assesment of how fragile they are. It was a really great contrast, and shows how Lucy has changed through her physical transformation. Though I feel like she's still the same isolated, unhappy person deep down as well.
Your writing style is just great, it reads very poetically! :) If this is out of your comfort zone, I'm excited to read something in your comfort zone! :)
Author's Response: Hi! Sorry it's taken me so long to reply to this review; future responses will be more prompt, I assure you!
I'm glad that you enjoyed reading this story, especially as you said you're iffy with most vampire stories.
Your feedback on how you found Lucy's thought process was great, especially her opinion of Hugo and Lily and the whole Weasley family dynamic. I really love how you described the illusion of a whole life lived together in such a short prologue, because that's exactly what I was aiming for. Yes, Lucy is determined to ensure that Hugo suffers for what he did, and she is indeed slipping off the deep end ;)
Claudine is definitely high-profile and irritable XD Her reason for wanting to keep the number of vampires low will be revealed in future chapters, I assure you!
Lucy is indeed the same unhappy person deep down. Some aspects of her personality have indeed changed, but you're absolutely right - deep down, not much has changed at all.
I'm honoured that you find my style poetic, and that you're excited for more - I'll be rerequesting!
Thank you! ♥