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Review:MargaretLane says:
Really like the opening paragraph here. You set the scene and create atmosphere really well, it seems.

Like the way you include the information that she was a Ravenclaw. It kind of tells us something about her.

I think it makes sense that she'd be afraid of them, in their wolf form at least. That's only common sense. It's stretching that fear to their human form that becomes problematic.

And I didn't actually expect her to be bitten. Certainly not in the first chapter. Really good cliffhanger. Definitely makes me want to read on.

I'm also a LITTLE intrigued about the fact she's dating the guy who seemed to be with her sister in the epilogue. Of course, this could be years later and the kiss between Victoire and Teddy couldn't have been a one-time thing. But it's interesting nonetheless.

Really good story. 9 out of 10.

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!

I am glad you liked the opening paragraph and found it to set the scene well.

I always like to include little details about my characters so it's good to know you appreciate that.

Indeed, stretching the fear to human form is just absurd, and having grown up among Harry, Ron, and Hermione, and of course Teddy and Bill, I don't think she'd ever be afraid of their human form, just their wolf one =)

Well the story is all about her coping with the physical and emotional changes that come with being a werewolf so it was important for her to be bitten. I am pleased I caught you off guard though as I didn't want it to be predictable.

More on Teddy/Dom is revealed in Chapter 3 (and they're touched upon in Chapter 2). I am kind of tired of Teddy/Vic and Teddy/Dom is my new OTP so I hope you like the pairing in my story!

Thanks a lot for your lovely comments!


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