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Review:-BookDinosaur- says:
-BookDinosaur- here again!

I liked this chapter, I feel that the reactions of Ron and Hermione were good, and you wrote Ginny very very well, so kudos to you for that.

However, I would have liked to see the reactions of the Weasley family more-you left them just as the news had sunk in, so we didn't get to see their grief or reaction to the bad news.

Also, a small thing, but one I liked- I think you managed to write Fleur's French accent well, it always annoys me a little bit when an author writes her accent wrongly, but you did it well, and even let her slip into French. However, I don't think that she would slip into French when she was particularly upset, not for a small sentence like that. That's just my opinion though, feel free to ignore.

Oh, and Arthur was very good, him and his insistence to 'make an example' made me giggle.

All in all, a good chapter that I enjoyed reading.

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I've added notes into the chapter to let the reader see more of the Weasley's grief and their reactions to the bad news.

Also, I decided to change Fleur's French statement into English because it's before their are given the bad news so she wouldn't slip into French.

Thank you very much!


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