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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hi, Elphaba back again! I really enjoyed this chapter.

This may be my favorite passage: "Dumbledore had told him that night that he wasn't a killer. Draco, in a burst of the childish arrogance he had been raised with, had denied it."

I like this a lot too: "Ever since the very first day they'd met, Potter had an excellent knack of making Draco feel like a blubbering idiot." Your perspective on Draco's psyche would definitely surprise Harry. I find it fascinating that Draco doesn't look down on Harry, but feels like he's always existed in his shadow. I love this interpretation; I think there's a lot of truth in it. :)

While I do think the Wizengamot would go easy on Draco as a result of Harry's testimony, I think it is too much of a stretch to let him off completely. I think it would be more likely that they'd give him a light sentence. Or (if you feel that Harry should get him completely off the hook) you could add a few more points to Harry's testimony -- he saw that Draco was not going to go through with murdering Dumbledore, heard Dumbledore offer him asylum, and was aware that Draco's family was in danger.

Overall, I think this is a great piece! :) I'm looking forward to the third chapter.

Author's Response: I love Draco, considering he has a lot of depth to his character, and I've always imagined that he's always felt a little overshadowed by Harry, so I definitely focused on that here.

I re-read this the other day, and I definitely see what you mean regarding the rushed decision. I wrote this really late at night - as in, 3 AM or so - so I clearly wasn't paying close enough attention to what I was writing, because it does get kind of jumpy there.

Thanks for the review! :)

-ShadowRose (Taylor)


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