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Review:Lululuna says:
Hi! I'm really excited to see this story updated, as I've been keeping an eye out for it in the Recently Added! :)

First of all I really love the descriptions at the beginning. It's an excellent example of "showing, not telling": it's very easy to write "it was hot," but you've given life and dimension and effects to that hotness. I loved the detail about Rose getting a sunburn, and the stray cats she befriended- it seems to say a lot about her character! :)

I felt like I could really relate to Rose's eagerness and slight awkwardness when asking Dalia for an interview. Being a journalism student I can certainly sympathize! :P You really got Rose's freshness down so well, as well as Dalia's slight confusion. As a frequent tourist, I can also relate to being pestered by merchants to buy and feeling guilty about lying the way out of it, as well as interacting with locals like Dalila and experiencing their different ways of interacting. You capture these relateable and often universal events so smoothly!

I absolutely loved the descriptions of the shop itself as well, and the contrasts with the mystical scents of the shop against the office. You have a real talent for painting a living picture with your words, and I can tell how much thought and care you've put into choosing them! :) The attention to authenticity is also a very wonderful attribute.

I like the idea of Scorpius being a curse breaker! It's just such an awesome and hardcore job! :P Also, I enjoyed how he and Al were both Ravenclaws: it's unusual but fit very well. Rose's fears about being awkward around Scorpius were very sweet and realistic as well.

Anyway this is another amazingly written chapter and I'm eager to see where this story goes next! :)

Author's Response: Hey there! I'm so glad that you were excited about this, as I really loved this chapter!

I'm so glad that you liked the descriptions. In the last chapter it was a bit more tell than show, but first chapters never seem to go well with me and I got more into the flow in this one, so it was considerably easier:)

I'm glad that you could relate to it, as I tend to be like that when asking for things like that, so it was fun to make someone else be in my situation for a change :P Haha, yeah that happened to me in Morocco which I figured would be similar for Egypt so it was fun to include! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it though :D

I can't express how pleased/shocked/ahahaha about the description, I used to be terrible at it, it was so bad there was literally none! So when hear that it's so lovely:D

I always imagined Scorpius being a little rebel at heart so him being a curse breaker seemed to fit the idea! That's the great thing about next gen, anything really goes in that so it was fun to include!

Thank you for this review, it really brightened my day ♥ I hope you enjoy the rest of the story too!

-Kiana :D

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