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Review:Calypso says:
Just saw that you've updated this! (I'm observant :P)

Your description of Egypt was amazing! You made it so vibrant and vivid, I could just picture it... I liked the contrast between the description of the heat, and the sun, and the dust in this chapter and the description of the rain in the last one.
And I did feel for Rose with the freckles/sunburn issue!

Dalila seems very intriguing... It was interesting to see Rose interacting with her- her reticence contrasting with Rose's confidence. Again, brilliant description of the inside of the perfume shop! I can't wait to see how Rose's investigations unfold... The rest of Dalila's family seem interesting too! Will we get to meet them?

Ooh and Scorpius! I liked the bit of backstory you gave about him and Rose- it was enough to put the reader in the picture, but not so much as to slow up the narrative. He seems like a pretty nice guy so far- I look forward to seeing more of him!

Well done on this chapter! I really enjoyed it! The way you describe the places in Egypt is simply stunning, and I can't wait to see how the plot develops!


Author's Response: Hey Bethany! Haha, you definitely are observant :P

I'm so glad that you liked my descriptions, I used to forget about them so my stories were really bare, but it's so much fun to include :D I didn't think of the contrast, so that's a happy conincidence :D I'm one of those lucky people who rarely burn, but I've heard all about the suffering from my mum :P

You will definitely get to meet them again, and I'm really glad you liked her! Her and and her grandfather are going to play quite a big part in the story. I'm so excited to write the investigations too, as I've never written a mystery before but they're so much fun!

I'm so glad the backstory didn't slow the narrative, I wanted to provide some but I felt that I went into too much depth there, so that's a big relief to hear!

I'm so glad that you loved the chapter and the descriptions, and thank you for this wonderful review it really made me smile :D


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