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Review:soufflegirl99 says:
The tension you build up in this piece is so well crafted, and your characterisation of Padma is perfection! I think you captured the suspense and fear of a raven claw brilliantly in this, and the whole title is beautifully simple and inventive.

You had me on the edge of my seat, when she knows there's something behind her, and it's actually Malfoy. That was expertly done, and the range of sentences really added that eerie effect. I think the use of dialogue really helped as well, just to keep the pace going and keep the reader engaged.

The way you write Malfoy is brilliant! Straight from Rowling's characterisation, and you really add the arrogant and inquiring side to him, that makes him so believable and realistic. I loved your version on him - and I'd like to see more of him!

The format and structure is fantastic too - it really helps keep the story at a varying pace - creating compelling suspense, and then steady flow at times. The time you did it in is original too, I don;t read much about their seventh year, so I think it's such a cool and creative one shot - a quirky character, time, and plot!

Overall, an awesome descriptive and wholesome piece of writing. It had me gripped, and I think you really write Padma's thoughts well. Awesome!

Sophie :D

Author's Response: Hey Sophie! This review was such a lovely surprise!

I'm glad you liked the characterisation of Padma and Draco here. Because I love minor characters, Padma was great fun to write and I enjoyed exploring her character here. Malfoy was more of a challenge because he's been written about much more than characters I normally use. You never know, we might see more of him in the future!

I'm pleased that the flow and pace seemed appropriate for the story. The seventh year at Hogwarts is really interesting, because we don't know much about it at all - it's something I'd like to explore more in the future, I think.

Thank you for a fantastic review - you've put a massive smile on my face!

Sian :)


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