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Review:patronus_charm says:
I ♥ Alice + Frank there's something about those two which is really adorable, I can't really say what it is but their story could be considered more tragic than James and Lily's due to where they ended up and you really caught that in this one-shot.

I adored Aliceís characterisation. I think it was the line about her having a pudgy face and that made me aw as pudgy seems to be word which really fits Neville so it was great you applied to Alice. I felt so bad for her getting bullied like that at school, as sheís just a lovely person and it really made me sad about it.

One thing I found really effective is the way you interspersed her memories of getting to know Frank and being at school with those of the funeral. It really made it effective and I feel as if I got a complete story of their lives and you didnít need to go into what happened after, as everyone, unfortunately, knows.

I really loved the tender parts about how Alice met Frank as, again, they were adorable. I think it was the bit about their hands touching in The Leaky Cauldron which really made my heart warm. The clumsiness of both of them reminded me again of Neville.

The ending Ė ah that made me have so many feels! At first it was cuteness over Alice reminiscing so much that she forgot she was at Nevilleís christening, then shock when the Death Eaterís turn up and then fear for Marlene as she didnít manage to get away. Even though Alice is an Auror and was in OoP it made sense for her just to flee as her love for her baby was greater than fighting Death Eaters, and that reminded me of Lily and Harry.

Anyhow thanks for the great swop as I really enjoyed that one-shot! ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hi! :) I'm so glad you liked the story, and thought it was a fitting tribute to Alice and Frank! I loved writing them, I wrote this for a challenge which was too enticing to resist!

I'm really glad you liked Alice and her characterization! I wanted to make her realistic as possible, and in my mind she was a bit like Neville in the way she doesn't realize how wonderful she is. I felt bad for her being bullied as well, but felt like not everyone would understand kids like Alice!

Okay, I'm so very happy to hear that you thought the story flowed and didn't come across as too fragmented with the different memories. I was worried about that! :)

The touching hands was one of my favourite bits to imagine! I was so proud of Alice for making the first move, haha. They're just too cute together! :)

Yay for feels! I'm glad you approved of Alice fleeing, she loved Neville more than anything and his safety was her primary concern, even if it meant being slightly selfish and not staying to help.

I loved this review, and thank you so much for your lovely words!!! :D


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