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Review:Aphoride says:
Hey there - stopping by from the forums with your requested review! :)

I have to mention that I adore stories about minor characters and I've always wondered how on earth Snape's parents got together - you know, because their relationship in the books is totally destroyed - and so I'm really, really fascinated by this anyway :)

Moving on, this is fabulous. I love how you've started with something almost totally different, and almost totally unconnected to Eileen and Tobias, but it just gives me so many questions! What is the curse? How does it continue? What should Reynold not do/have done? I'm assuming Penelope, from her surname, is Eileen's distant ancestor... ah, so many questions! I just want to know more... :)

Your historical accuracy is amazing, as well. While there's not huge amounts of detail (which is understandable, it's a woman giving birth, which doesn't require all that much historical detail), everything which you include is just perfect. You mention the rug, that Ursula's cottage is leased to her by Lord Alfred, that the letter is to be given to Reynold when he's fourteen, rather than perhaps seventeen or eighteen as it would be now. It just fits so well, and you use it all so well - none of it feels extraneous or useless.

Your descriptions were also equally wonderful. I could feel for Penelope as she went through that ordeal and I could just see her lying listlessly on the bed, begging for paper and a quill and ink so she could write... it was such a strangely touching scene - all of it, really - and so emotive a prologue that I don't really know what to say, lol. It was just wonderful.

Grammar... spelling... everything is perfect. There's not a single mistake anywhere, there is nothing I can really say to you to improve, other than that you must write more and re-request (if I don't add this to my favourites and start following anyway... ;D)!

I loved this - please please please re-request! A favourite is coming your way too... :)

Aph xx

Author's Response: Hello darling! Thank you so much for stopping by!

Oh my goodness, I'm all giggly and ridiculous and just don't know how I'm going to respond to such a lovely review!

Yay! Someone else who adores minor characters! Eileen and Tobias are my OTP, so they're kind of my favorites. I love the intrigue and mystery behind them. I want to go beyond Severus's limited (and limiting) views of his parents. They obviously loved each other very much, you know? I mean, she's a pureblood marrying a Muggle which, back then, was frowned upon. So basically, I think some terrible things had to happen to them to create such a rift in their relationship.

I'm so stoked that you're so curious! I want readers to be intrigued! Come chapter four, you will get another glimpse into this era, promise! I'm so excited for you to find out what's going to be happening! Ahhh!

I do try to do my research when it comes to the historical accuracy of it all, even with the 1950s when it comes to Eileen and Tobias. I want it to be as close as possible. I'm so glad you don't think anything is extraneous. You'll find that I don't write scenes or descriptions just as filler. I don't believe in filler. Everything has a purpose, even the smallest of pieces.

I'm so stoked you like my descriptions! I normally use my talents for oneshots because it allows me to pour my heart and soul into descriptions and imagery without being pretentious. But here, I've got to create a story, so I've got to tone it down.

I am literally a ball of ushy-gushy right now. Thank you so much for the WONDERFUL review. I am so, so happy you enjoyed and cannot wait for you to read the next chapters!

Shelby


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