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Review:Maelody says:
Hey, here I am with your review!

Wow, let me just say if you hadn't requested, I would have searched this story out. It was amazing! You nearly had me reduced to tears right at the end just because the realization of where she was hit me and it was so sad.

You beautifully transition time in her thoughts, and I really admire that you've done so. You've not only written a story about Alice, but you honestly created her character. Even though Frank and August weren't really speaking parts, you did such a good job at describing them that I felt that I knew who they were as people just because of the way you wrote them.

M'alice was pretty awesome. She almost sort of reminds me of the Luna of her time, though maybe not quite as 'mad'. Oh, if only the students then would know someone like Luna would step through the walls of Hogwarts. They'd take everything they said about poor Alice back! She is so loving, compassionate, curious, bashful, tiny, and beautifully written. Honestly, she went through a rage of emotions which were expressed so clearly that you could see an Alice being created, and know instantly that this is how Alice was.

The way she doted on Frank made me smile. How he was older, she was younger, and then even then everyone else was younger than her. She fell in love with him, and their wedding ceremony was everything I never imagined it to be, but the only way I can picture it now because it was in such a dark time, and in such a quick pace, that you knew exactly what you were doing. Am I praising you too much? Nah ;).

This story was beautiful. In fact, I can't help but think that if I were to go back and read it again, I'd cry for sure because I know just where it's going now. Every quirk has a story, every pro-noun has its meaning, and every person has a life.

If I had to knit-pick anything, it would be the end on how you described her hair. In the books, it says that her hair is silver. I think that was in the fourth (maybe the fifth?) when it was mentioned, so I wouldn't think that her hair would still be brown. Also, how Neville says that he needs someone to love him. I don't know why, but I've always imagined that Neville always knew his parents loved him. It was their own special way of loving him, even if he didn't think they could feel for him the way they could.

That's what broke my heart, by the way. The fact that she was recalling bits of things in her head, such as the fact that Neville was her son, and he seemed to be growing and she didn't know why. She wanted to be a mother to her baby, and she wanted to see him grow up, but it's all too confusing for her.

This was absolutely beautiful! From your own descriptions, to the Alice and Wonderland bits that added just the slightest bit of humor for me because I could recognize the reference. I'm so glad you requested, and I'm going to go ahead and add it to my favorites as well. :)

Author's Response: Hello! Wow, I am so flattered and honoured that you liked the story. I had no idea how it would really come across and getting this positive feedback means a lot to me. :)

Alice just sprang into my head fully formed and created her own character through the words. I'm really happy she seemed round and realistic, and that she seemed like an entire character through her thoughts. Frank as well!

I thought M'alice was great as well! She is like Luna, only Luna doesn't care what people thought of her whereas Alice does. She's such an amazing person, but can't see it in herself, which I think is something a lot of incredible people experience. I'm really happy she came across as a lovely person while she couldn't really see herself as being brave, or pretty, or likeable.

I'm not much of a wedding person, and I felt like Alice and Frank just thought this sort of ceremony was appropriate if not as romantic. In those times it was certainly harder to organize these events safely, and again Alice doesn't like to make a fuss. :)

Thank you so much for all your lovely words, they're making me blush! Giving this story meaning was so important to me while writing it. I'll go back and adjust the hair colour: maybe it could be another symbol of how she has changed from the Alice she once was. I think that she does still love Neville, just doesn't know how to express it, and for a kid like Neville that's hard to accept, and he can't help but feel pathetic and bitter at times. :(

Thank you so much again for this truly wonderful review, and for favouriting the story! :D You're the best! :)


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