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Review:Broken Butterfly says:
Interesting story. I would have to say that romance definatly is not a part of the story, so you have that covered. But it isn't really emphasised clearly that it is NOT a part of the story. I would try and put a backstory in here too, just a bit have a story between Lorcan and the girl. Some History. I really like your closing line, esecially as I'm a psych major at university. Great job so far, I think this is coming along nicely. Can I just ask though: What exactly is gobstones? I'm not familiar if it is canon and it may have taken away from my understanding of teh chapter.

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for your review!!

To be honest, I didn't really picture Lorcan and Cassiopeia having a backstory, necessarily, because up until this point, they've stayed away from each other. But now that you mention it, I think it would be a great idea to maybe go into some of Lorcan's history and his fear of women. That might give a better foundation for his fear of Cassiopeia, because she is certainly his worst nightmare!!

And yes, the psychology thing came about from my psychology class: I really love psych, and when I sat down to write this story, I started thinking about Sigmund Freud and all of his theories about human sexuality. It seemed to fit in a world where romance was not allowed to exist. And I can definitely try to emphasize the non-romance of the whole thing a little bit more. :)

As for Gobstones: It's a game in canon that has pieces that squirt the opponent in the eye with ink. It was mentioned briefly in the first book, and it doesn't seem to be a very widely-played game amongst the canon students of Hogwarts. I totally understand your confusion. :)

Thanks again for your review!!


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