|Review:||Violet Gryfindor says:|
Ugh, wow. There's so much I could say, yet it's hard to decide where to start because this story is just so good, beautifully written and artful in its characterizations. The style is engrossing, with just enough of a poetic feel to enhance the story and its tragedy - it's interestingly most poetic near the beginning, then as their relationship grows and begins to feel less satisfying for both of them, the language becomes harsher, less "romantic". Their relationship feels wrong, though not for any of the usual reasons I've seen in fanfiction, and this draws me further into this story - I kept going back to read and re-read the sections because there was so much there, multiple meanings and details to take in and digest.
Hermione and Draco "are weak and so terribly human", as you say at one point, and that's the perfect way to describe them here. Before that line came up in the story, I was admiring how realistically you'd portrayed them, making them very human and flawed. Their relationship makes sense in this context, and I liked how accidental it all was, how it just happened without either of them meaning it to. I really liked how you chose to make them broken, and how much this has changed their identity. They are not only broken in heart and body, but in mind and spirit - they're only fragments of their past selves. Another line that stood out was when Hermione thinks about others see her as the strong one, but inside, she's not strong at all. She's afraid, and this fear only grows as the story continues. Being with Draco is only a temporary fix, and it's not even that good a fix. She still feels lost, alienated, and the affair with Draco, though it will continue, will give her nothing.
One thing that stood out most - though it seems like most things about this story stood out to me - was how Hermione keeps thinking about the past, particularly Draco's treatment of her. She's still struck by the fact that his blood is the same colour as hers and that he wears Muggle clothing. She never changes her mind, not completely. What's most painful is when she forces her mind to imagine him as Ron. It's a very complicated relationship, in which Hermione wants someone who is as broken as she is, but she ends up with Draco, and she never quite comes to terms with that. She falls into a relationship with him, but she never falls in love with him.
I don't know how to deal with this kind of story and the series of emotions it evokes. The more I think about it, the more affecting it is, hence all of the rambling. It's brilliant how you put this story together - the writing, characters, and emotional power are astounding. You write Dramione like no other, but more importantly, you write people and relationships in a complex and incredibly moving way. Amazing work!