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Review:MadiMalfoy says:
First of all, I'd like to say that I really like this story! JKR never really specified who actually killed Ariana so I'm glad you decided to write about it and kind of pick who it would have actually been, Grindewald.

The dynamic between Gellert and Ariana is already fairly well developed in this chapter, which is a great thing. I think if you were to specify how old Ariana really was when she died, then you could reflect that in her character--her dialogue and actions as a ghost (if that's what she is).

Overall, this was a very well-written chapter! Great job so far! :) xx
~MadiMalfoy

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

I did envision Ariana as a ghost and the penguin as the physical representation of Gellert's guilt.

Ariana was 14 when she died but she never emotionally grew up after the attack. I will review the chapter and see how to incorporate more of her child-like view and actions.

Thank you very much!


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