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Review:DumbledoresArmyOfOne says:
Hey, I'm here from the Gryffindor review exchange to talk about your lovely story!

i love that this is a prologue. As a one shot, it could stand on its own as a really heart-wrenching story, but as a prologue for Alice's life it's really amazing to have all of this background information about her life's beginnings, her family dynamic and all of that.

Frank and Alice Longbottom have always been some of my favourite characters in the series- they sacrificed so much for a better life, truly suffered a fate worse than death, and it only makes me admire Neville more and appreciate the strength he needed to live with this memory of the Death Eater's crimes just haunting him. I think you really portrayed that profound bond they had in your story.

I'm really interested to see what kind of story this will turn out to be! I can't wait to see what Alice is like as an older child, and Frank too.

Really, that was a profound insight into Hannah's mind- how hard it is to explain death. Frank was so cute and brave, even as a six year old, and it rather tugged at my heart the way he talks about his grandpa.

Really wonderful story! The only thing I might suggest is maybe look over it one more time. There are a few tiny mistakes as far as verb tenses go, but nothing major. Also, you used the word 'emotions' a lot. Sometimes it's a bit more effective if you use a less general word.
Again, that's just my opinion, and it's your story :D

This was fantastic, a great start! I can't wait to read more!
~Gilly

Author's Response: thank you so much for the awesome review! I'm really glad you liked it and I'm happy that you're excited for my next story :)

-Amanda


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