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Review:ShadowRose says:
Sorry for the delay, but I'm finally here with your requested review!

First of all, the character names are BRILLIANT. By the time you got to their middle names, I was practically falling out of my chair laughing. I mean,
Autumn Jonquil? How unfortunate. :P

I like how even though the sisters are similar, you've already established their own individual personalities. Fern's the artist, Ivy wants to be a Healer, and so on. I also like that you managed to throw pieces of information like that into the story without stating it outright, but by mentioning little things as the chapter goes on.

I love how the Weasley/Potter family is so distributed across the four Houses, and also I think it's interesting that Bill and Fleur are divorced. I feel like the Ron/Hermione divorce scenario has been beat to a pulp, so it's refreshing to see it happen to a different couple. Wow, I totally didn't mean for that to sound like I support divorce, but, I mean, given the current divorce rate, it makes sense that one of the couples would divorce.

I like how there's already been quite a bit going on in this first chapter, instead of it simply being an introduction with no action. I still get the feeling that I've been properly introduced to all of the characters, but at the same time, I didn't have to wade through paragraph after paragraph of physical descriptions or anything like that. Instead, they came naturally.

This whole chapter flowed really well, even though it did manage to go through quite a few different scenes.

Another thing I LOVED was Roger and Noah. They're so funny, and it was an interesting way of throwing some slash into the mixture without it being a full-on slash story.

I also think it's cool that you brought Sophie's Muggle brother and physics into the mix. I love that they're trying to study the crossroads between science and magic, because that's something I've always wondered about.

Let's see, favourite lines:

"But as you've realised, sanity is a relative concept in our family."

An awesome transition into the next scene, and really funny too.

"It was only then that we were capable of having a full conversation, because we didn't have the option of leaving in a huff, slamming the door as we left.

Ivy has tried. Once."

Oh gosh, considering my friends and I were discussing how to exit a moving vehicle the other day, this line cracked me up too. :D

So far, this all seems pretty Hogwart-y (speaking of which, I like that word... I may start using it more in reviews) and I didn't find any glaring cliches yet.

Oh gosh, I feel like I'm supposed to wrap up a squee-ing review like this with at least some constructive criticism, but GAH, I can't find anything. Although I guess that's a good thing, now isn't it? :)

Awesome first chapter, and I'm looking forward to the next ones!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)

Author's Response: Hi! Massive apologies for the delay in responding...

I'm glad you like the names! Originally, I was going to write a parody, but this was the result instead.

The Ron/Hermione divorce really has been beaten to a pulp, hasn't it? Bill and Fleur came as an obvious answer, I suppose. For me, it made sense that at least one Weasley couple would split up eventually, and I couldn't find any other for whom a divroce would make sense...

Ah, Roger and Noah! Their inclusion follows the inclusion of a divorce (in my head anyway) because I feel like the portrayal of families in fanfiction is very two-dimensional: either you've got perfect families or abusive ones. There seems to be no middle, you know?

Hahaha you picked up on some of my favourite lines :)

No worries, squeeing reviews are fine by me, and thank you very much for this one, it made me very happy!



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