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Review:MargaretLane says:
Hmm, that's interesting, that everything about Voldemort is in the restricted section. I would have thought that would be stuff they'd want every witch and wizard to know about at a young age. I wonder if there's a specific reason for it, like people trying to imitate him or if it's just an overprotective, "but it would scare poor innocent children" thing.

I saw a couple of mistakes, like Albus's list of questions about his dad should really all be separate sentences and you've put a capital letter on "Answered" when writing "answered Ralf" when it should be a small "a".

I'm also surprised Harry's told his son absolutely nothing. I can understand him playing it down and now letting his children know just how famous he is, because he mightn't want them thinking it makes them important or something, but hiding his whole past from them is odd. Again I wonder if there's some significant reason for this.

That's sad about Hagrid being one of the last half-giants, but hardly surprising considering that giants were dying on in canon.

You do Hagrid's accent well. It is HARD to write; I had to do it fairly recently.

Harry didn't even tell his kids he was the Quidditch captain?! Hmm, this is mysterious. I could see reasons he mightn't want to tell them about the whole Voldemort thing - worrying it'd frighten them or that'd make them think their family was really important or encourage them to take the same kind of risks he did as a kid. But I can't imagine why he wouldn't want them to know he'd bee Quidditch captain. Interesting.

And of course, Hagrid just assumes Albus will be in Gryffindor even though he hasn't been sorted yet. Will be interesting to see if he's right. I've kind of a feeling he will be, but I guess I'll have to wait and see.

Author's Response: Everything about Voldemort is in the Restricted Section due to the violence in which he has caused to the wizarding world and the dark magic in which he has used. Many wizards may be interested in dark wizardry and Voldemort could be their idol, they could have the same passion as Tom Riddle did when he was a teenager, hence the Restricted Section, besides, looking in the real world now, 11 year olds tend not to learn much about Hitler due to his violent methods as they are too grewsome for 11 year olds to learn about in detail... It is excactly the same with Voldemort hence the Restricted Section.

The reasons as to why Harry has kept his life a secret from his sons is reveiled in later Chapters and those to come. I would not decide to keep his life a secret without a reason. The reason he did not mention that he was quidditch captian again is to be revealed much later, one minor reason being that he did not want his kids to resemble him as much due to the danger it could put them in.

Thankyou very much for the compliments on Hagrid's accent, I believe it would be hard to write it now however I actually found his accent easy to write at the time I did. I wrote this story up till Chapter 7 between the ages of 10 and 13... This will be why there are so many mistakes, a child of that age does not notice them as well, however thankyou for pointing them out.
If I recieve more reviews I may decided to continue writing the story where I will edit all mistakes, I just wanted to know what people would think of my story.

Thankyou again for this review, it is extremely useful, I only wish you will continue to review and read the rest of my story. Thankyou.

Rachael


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