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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey there Bethany! I saw you pop up in Ravenclaw Review Tag and decided to come back and revisit Daphne!

I really liked the beginning when Theo arrived at the café. It was really lovely and I kept on feeling these fuzzies about Daphne’s thoughts as they really were adorable. I like how you’re slowly developing their relationship and letting it take its natural course. I much prefer reading as it’s so much more fun seeing the slow progress of them getting there.

I’m really enjoying the addition of Astoria in the story. She adds this light hearted feel to it, and the idea of the party was great. I hope she continues to bring out this feel spirit in Daphne as she needs that to happen. I’m also really eager to see how she and Draco get together. I imagine it’s going to happen at the Death Eater get together Daphne’s being forced to hold.

Back to the Death Eater get together I can’t wait for that, and I’m glad I now know the full contents of the letter, as that had been annoying me not knowing. The letter sounded just like Pansy by the way, and I can imagine her writing it and thinking this was the best idea ever. It’s interesting to speculate how Pansy’s changed and how she’ll react to Daphne, as she doesn’t seem that much of a Death Eater lover.

I only have a few tiny CCs for you. Here ‘o’ clock‘ I think the ‘o‘ and the ‘clock‘ should be joined as one. Then you used a colon quite a lot with speech like here ; A sudden thought caught at her:’ this may just be mean but I think it might look a little better with period or a semicolon instead. That’s just personal opinion though.

Anyhow it was a really enjoyable chapter ♥


Author's Response: Hello Kiana! How lovely to see you back!

I'm so glad that you like the way Daphne and Theo's relationship is developing. Romance isn't my most comfortable genre, so it's good to know that that aspect of the story is working well!

As I think I've said to you before, Astoria is one of my favourite characters to write in this! You're exactly right that she brings out a lighter side in Daphne (and stops her taking herself too seriously), and I'm also hoping that both sisters are sort of learning to value each other. And yes, Draco will be at the meeting :P

It's absolutely wonderful to hear that Pansy sounds in character- I had a lot of trouble finding a good voice for her. I'm glad that you're interested the dynamics between Pansy and Daphne- more of that at the meet-up!

And thank you for your CCs! I'll go back and fix the o'clock thing- I'm not sure about the colon/semicolon thing either, but I'll have a read through and see what seems best!

Thanks again for such a lovely, useful review! (as yours always are!)


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