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Review:Jchrissy says:
Oh :(!!!

This was the closest I've ever come to really feeling bad for Tori. Every is falling apart so, so much. I didn't even think of her being pregnant! Why, I have no idea, but oh my gosh. This is also the first time that I can see a tiny bit of hope that she may have the chance yet to become a good person. She's changing and she knows that, but she doesn't want that. Yet she needs to realize that's the only thing that can possibly give her a chance at become a person again, ha!

Oh I do NOT condone her actions at the party! You are pregnant, missy! Not that she cares, I'm sure. And it seems very in character. But still, bad!

You really did an awesome job in this building us up to the sort of breaking of everything. The pregnancy, James catching her with Albus, Becky seeing it... it was all just so, so perfect. And it starts to show is why Rebecca may be so devoted now. Something must happen very shortly after this chapter and we'll see why that resulted in Becky's unwavering devotion. I'm guessing whatever happens, they don't make up before it does and then she feels terrible.

So much stress and drama in this chapter! I loved it! And now I'm torn between trying to figure out if Tori will do something bad to herself or if she'll just up and leave... eek!

Also, awesome job showing more of James's anger in this. It was the same sort as when he told Tori to shut up as when Charlie is wearing her costume. Not nearly as angry of course, but you really do well with keeping him the same person! Just a worse version of himself with Tori and a better version with Charlie.

Author's Response: You felt almost bad for Tori? I must have done something right in this chapter then! That is definitely encouraging! I think Tori definitely started breaking down in this chapter, which was very fun to write.

Yep, this definitely was a very drama filled chapter - I mean, Tori loves the drama, but not this kind of pull-you-hair out drama.

I've always thought of the Potter's as having a very angry streak in their genes - I mean, Harry becomes a typical angry teenage boy in book five, and I definitely think that shows in James!

Thanks for the lovely review!

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