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Review:Calypso says:
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I really liked your description of the Burrow, all smartened up for the wedding! I enjoyed all the detail you went into with the flowers and everything- and the simile about the sunlight coming to the wedding too was so pretty!

I also enjoyed the bit with little James- it was amusing to read his perspective on everything, and that they had to put the cake on a high table to stop him stealing it! I know he's not really major part of this, but I did enjoy that little bit of characterisation!

Your Krum seemed very true to canon, which I liked. You brought across his gruff, rather surly exterior really well, I thought. I felt so sorry for him, coming to the wedding to wish Hermione well, despite him still having feelings for her, and I felt even more sorry for him after all his thoughts whilst walking away from the Burrow. The only thing I would mention there is that I felt a bit as if a lot of information about Krum's life had been told very quickly; if you could find a way of spreading it out a bit, or conveying it in another way, it might flow a little better...? Just a thought.

And I'm very intrigued over what will happen to him now! It's a clever way to start a story, with a wedding scene which feels sort of like an ending- it makes me very curious as to what's in store for the future!
Great chapter!

-Bethany

Author's Response: Hey, Bethany! :D
I've always wanted to write about Ron and Hermione's wedding and I also like to explore weddings through small child's eyes. So I kind of combined both in this story. =] I'm not very good in describing a scene, so I can't tell how happy I am to know that you liked them!
Writing Viktor Krum as your hero as well as sticking to canon is very hard. I failed to characterize him in my previous story featuring him, so I just improved him in this one. Viktor is very strong and he wouldn't hide from Hermione in any case. That's why he showed up I guess.
Haha you're the first person to mention this. Yes, the wedding might be a cool epilogue. =]

Thanks so much! Hope you'd come again!


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