|Review:||Bobby Dazzler says:|
Hey again Claire,
First up, why you no likey Snape? :P
I was having trouble typing even that much cuz my daughter was climbing all over me wanting to say hi, so hi from Lily (... yes her name is Lily lol), and now that she's asleep, back to my review! :)
Ok, 1, love the banner. I don't judge books by their covers but that's a nice peice of artwork there, love it! :)
I too LOVE Russian history. I find it fasinating, particularly cuz I've "married" into a Russian family, so learning everything is just so interesting to me, so I very much enjoyed this having a tie in with Russia.
There were a few spelling and grammar mistakes throughout this one though which got a bit confusing, particularly between tenses. In a few instances you'd switch from present to past tense and back again, so might wanna just have another read over this one and fix up a few areas where it doesn't quite read right.
Snape is such a complex character, and not many stories reflect on his younger days growing up at Spinners End or with knowing Lily before Hogwarts etc. I think you did a good job with the imagery, making his home dark and cluttered, and not very inviting, compared to his visions of Lily bathed in sunlight on the swings etc, it just balanced out nicely and you could see he'd found some sort of peace in his little personal hell.
To me, reading this one, Snape seemed a little one-sided in his thought process, like he hadn't opened his mind up to the entire situation only when put in the position by Voldemort and Dumbledore to spy on one another. He just seemed very one track minded about muggleborns and erradicating them from the magical world. I think he would've had a view on it absolutely, but maybe not quite as strong? At the end of the day, Lily was a muggleborn too and he loved her more than anything in the world, so he might not have had such strong views given her heritage, though I'm sure he still would've had an opinion, absolutely. I think perhaps the influence of Rasputin might've come across a little too harshly in this one, given what we know of Snape's character, but it was still interesting to think that he was THAT corrupt and confused in his own mind. I enjoyed it :)
Off to read some more! :) xx
Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review! I think it was one of the few reviews with constructive criticism that I really get regarding my plot. Also, I'll really need to get a beta or something for all of my grammar issues. I realize now that tense isn't one of my strong points.
I also love Russian history! I think it's just so complex that there was so many possibilities, but this was just the way that was easiest for me to incoroporate Rasputin into magic.
Thanks so much for your lovely review! (: