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Review:Maelody says:
I really really like how you were able to smoothly jump in time periods the way you did. I thought for a minute there I would be reading Melanie's whole first year (which wouldn't have been a problem) but it was a nice transition from first year and to her sixth year. It gives us a nice set up on what she and the others think, and how each of them feel as a person and about who they are.

I wanted to hug Amanda for a little bit before I felt like sitting her down and saying, "If that's how you feel, then how do you feel about me?" Haha, though I understand her worries. Though, I'm a proud Slytherin through-and-through ;).

I do hope we get to see more Severus through Melanie's eyes! It would be great to see an up close and personal view of him other than Lily and/or himself.

James and Sirius bombarding the girls' compartment with ants was a nice touch. They were talking, yeah, but at least they kept their pranks in and it made their characters very believable.

I really liked this first chapter a lot. It goes through a lot of varying emotions and gives us just enough background that it makes it enjoyable and fun to see the characters already grow up in a sense. I can't wait to catch up with the rest of it! :) Great writing!

Author's Response: As for Mandy, everything she had ever been told about Slytherin was from her Gryffindor and Ravenclaw family. So she was bound to have an initial reaction like that.

I felt that the rivalry between Gryffindors and Slytherins couldn't always have been so hostile - it's not like 1/4 of the school is "evil". Snape was a special case for the Marauders, but I thought it couldn't have been like that with all the Slytherins. So I'm glad that seemed realistic.

Thank you so much for reading and for your review, I really appreciate it!! I am so glad you're enjoying the story :D


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