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Review:Jchrissy says:
Fine. You, miss author, you. Have forced me to review the last published chapter on this. My plan was to wait until you posted a new Undertow chapter, then review this. Then review that. Hoping by the time both of those reviews were done, there would be ANOTHER chapter. That plan did not work. I'm probably going to poke you as soon as I finish this review, btw.

Anyway , Lily. Is it bad to say that I love that she lied? When her mom confronted her about Lorcan. And I love that you've tied us back to the first chapter.

Back to the lying. We know how much Lily has put into this plan. We know how important it is to her to see it through, and with nothing being able to be done about Lorcan and the fact that she's a moody teenage girl, her lying felt very realistic.

The scene between Lily and Harry was one of my favorite to read. I think the realization of how young her father really was when he did what did did was an excellent thing to add in this chapter, and I felt like I wanted to hug them both. Even if Lily did use Harry's more push over nature to get herself to the Owlery :P. Their relationship seemed really natural though. I know I've said it a million times, but the fact that you can write such a normal and relatable family really makes me happy. So many stories have terrible parents or parents that spoiled their children to pieces and blah blah and this is just so normal. It's perfect.

And the end of this! The article and Lily's reasoning behind why it had to be someone framing Scorpius were just so solid. I love the way she's able to think things through. Obviously we see a bit of her own biased in it, but she definitely got Harry's skills for solving puzzles. She goes through and eliminates what it *couldn't* have been to help make it more clear of what had to have happened, and I love that.

And I also feel like Lily just got herself in way too deep... haha

Author's Response: One day I'll update this story again... I hope! At least your poking worked. I can't believe the other chapter is (finally!) almost done. You get 95% of the credit for that, just so you know.

I worry this story as a whole is taking way too long to unravel. I feel like this chapter really marks the end of "Act I," and like you said, brings us right back to the start, but I'm unsure about the length of the set-up. I guess I'll really have to write the rest to know for sure either way.

I'm so glad you liked the Harry/Lily section. I love writing relationships of all kinds, and I couldn't help throwing in a little father/daughter dynamic. I guess it's true you write what you know -- my childhood was just too normal for most fiction, I guess :P

I did try and "borrow" a bit from Harry here. In the books, he always had these solid-sounding reasons for why things were unfolding the way they were -- why this character was good or evil, what the bad guy must be up to, etc. -- only to find out later on he was totally wrong. I've tried to give that same confidence in her reasoning to Lily, but also that tendency to see what she wants to see in a situation.

I should warn you though, this is the last Snape-free chapter, so I may have lost the mojo on this story just in time :P

Thank you for always being such a lovely reviewer!!


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