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Review:-BookDinosaur- says:
-BookDinosaur- back again!

I liked this chapter as well, it had more dialogue and character interaction in it, something I was grateful for. I think that there was a good balance between the dialogue and the description, so well done on that.

The story flowed well between the scenes and chapters, so that was fine.

Just one thing I noticed was:
'She gave him another glare before storming from the room.'
I think that in that scene her mood swung rather quickly, questioning to angry to worried to really angry? And also, she never glared at Harry before that. You mentioned her frowning, but not glaring, so she can't give him another glare, if you know what I mean...?

Anyway, all, in all, a chapter I enjoyed reading. ;D

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Thank you for pointing out the arbitrary glare from Hermione. I've changed it to an exasperated look which should fit the scene better.

Thank you very much!


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