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Review:Lululuna says:
Tag! :)

Hi, so I'm glad I got the chance to come back and check out this story since I enjoyed "Ending It." When reading the prequel, I suspected that eventually Victoire would find out and everything would explode, and this story certainly did not disappoint! I felt so sorry for Victoire, and how this will forever taint her love for her sister as well as her fiance (as for Teddy, he doesn't deserve either of them!).

There was so much buildup at the beginning of the chapter, I could really feel the tension in suspecting what was about to happen. When she found the letter, I was just thinking "OH NO!" yet still felt like she deserved to know the truth.

I'm personally not a huge fan of swearing in stories, especially if its not in the dialogue, since I feel like there's always another word to use that holds the eloquence and flow of the writing together, so in terms of CC that's about all I've got. Feel free to ignore it, however!

You should consider writing a sequel one-shot that discusses what the girls' families and parents think about the whole situation, and maybe giving the girls some sort of closure! :)

This was another great story, well done! :)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

I am pleased you enjoyed this as well as Ending It, thanks. Of course, Victoire had to find out! I am glad the story didn't disappoint you. Teddy is a jerk yeah, haha.

Ah I love 'buildups' so I am glad it had that effect I was going for. Indeed, it would be cruel for her not to know the truth.

Oh, thanks for the advice. When I do an edit, I'll keep it in mind and see if I can tone down the swearing in the narrative (right now I can't even remember where I put swearing lol).

Yes, actually I have considered another sequel, one from Teddy's POV, focusing on the family's reactions. I am just looking for the right kind of inspiration!

Thank you for your lovely words!


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