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Okay, so I love the idea of this. I haven't seen many stories which detail how characters deal with lycanthropy, or anything similar, so it's a really interesting story already :)
I like how you haven't made her perfect - she's scared, she's terrified, she seems a little bit hypocritical at times, she's stubborn - but you've given her a relatively perfect life before the bite happens. It's nice because you get to kinda isolate the effects of the bite on her life, which I think is kinda cool... ;)
Plus, she's just all-round a good character. Like I said, there's the perfect-life-but-not-perfect-person aspect to her, she's a Ravenclaw not a Gryffindor ('Claws for the win!) which is less cliche for a Next Gen. character, she's obviously a Weasley with the red-hair and the stubborn streak... she's a very real character, and I like that.
I love how you had her not completing her assignment quick enough, being delayed, nearly going to safety, going back, going to the cabin and then trying to run away... it's odd because it gives a really good idea of who she is and what she's like without having to have much happen, which honestly, I think is pretty impressive ;) I'm really curious as to how you use her later, how she gets out of there... so many questions!
One quick thing - and this is being fairly picky, but I noticed it as soon as I'd read it - is the 'tresses of red tumbling behind her back' phrase. I just... gah, 'tresses of red' sounds a bit too much like poetry for me, tbh, I think maybe a simpler phrase would be better (you could even just say 'red tresses/locks' and it gets rid of the poetic effect), and 'tumbling' sort of indicates a falling down kinda thing... so I'm not quite sure how hair would tumble behind someone's back, if you get my meaning O.o I wouldn't normally mention something like this, but it made me stop and look at it again, and it's in your first paragraph, so it's kinda worth it, maybe. I'd just say look at it again, maybe change 'tumbling' because it seems a bit out of place...
Other than that your description is fabulous - just enough to add to the scene without slowing the pace down - the spelling/grammar is excellent (I couldn't find a single mistake and I normally pick up on things), the pace is really quick and lively... it was good. There's this certain edge to it all which just helps, and you've started it at such a good place, throwing the reader right into the action...
So yeah, I really enjoyed this (as if you couldn't tell... :P), so feel free to re-request whenever! :)
Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a ton for reading and reviewing =)
I am pleased you like the whole lycanthropy idea. It's something new that I wanted to experiment with so it's great to hear you like it =)
I really dislike perfect characters when I read them because they're so unrealistic, so I tried really hard to make Dominique realistic, with all her imperfections, it's good to know it worked.
Haha I hope your questions are answered properly in future chapters. Indeed, the first chapter didn't show much of her but it's great that you could still pick up on her personality.
Hmm, I was going for some deep descriptions thus the use of 'tumbling' and 'tresses of red'. I have actually read the phrase of 'hair tumbling behind the back' a couple of times, and it gives the impression of someone having long hair, so when they run the hair kind of tumbles... uh I am not sure if I am making much sense. Thank you for your advice though, I'll certainly take it into consideration if I do an edit of this chapter =)
I am glad that you liked the overall description though, and it's a huge relief that there were no spelling/grammar problems especially since English is not my first language.
Thank you for all your kind words! I look forward to your opinion of the other chapters so I'll definitely re-request!