Hi! I'm back, and sorry about the late response! I like this chapter as a continuation from the wedding, and I'm quite liking your voice as a writer. You have a very clear way of transitioning between characters, and the style is very reader-friendly and well structured, if that makes sense. It's very appealing to read! :)
I liked the little details that went into characterizing the family, like James' not wanting to be seen as "Potter's boy through and through," and Lily being excited to get her wand. The family dynamics were really intricate, and I could tell how close they all are, like when Hermione and Ginny went to comfort Molly. In a lot of fanfics Percy's lot seem to be a lot more uptight and seperate from the rest of the family, so it's refreshing how Molly is so close with the other Weasleys.
So the plot that Molly and Albus were eavesdropping on sounds very intruiging! I'm excited to find out what's going on, by the sounds of it some students in Slytherin are getting up to some unpleasant business. I was a little confused at first about why they were holding a Ministry meeting at the Potters and why Ginny was included, but since they were discussing a Potter kid it makes more sense. Also, I was a little curious about the urgency in which Percy charged in: did they just find out about these goings on at Hogwarts, or have there been suspicions for a long time? The other thing I wasn't sure about was the age difference between the kids: Albus must be thirteen if Lily is eleven, but he seems more mature. I do like how James is a considerable amount of years the elder, however, as usually he seems to be around the same age as Al. It's refreshing, as well! :) These are just things that popped up when I was reading the chapter, so just little gaps to keep an eye out for!
Anyway, I'm really liking this so far!! Please do feel free to re-request!! :)
Author's Response: Aw, I don't feel as if you were late at all! I'm just happy you came! :)
I'm glad you liked the continuation, and it really makes me happy that you like the voice! (Yes, that does make sense ;)) And it makes me really happy! My number one worry is always that my writing is too boring and generic, so I'm glad I'm speaking through!
I always read fics where Molly is uptight and distant, but I don't honestly see why. I always thought that after the Fred incident, Percy, though not perfectly normal like the rest, would try to be a bit more family oriented and try to be with the family a bit more. So yeah, I think Molly would be very close to the rest of her family! :) They are Weasley's after all ;).
I imagine the urgency was more to do with an argument. Percy wants his nephew to step in, and Kingsley doesn't think it is wise, and school is getting ever closer, and they have to start finding out now before it does start to get too late. Just a bit of putting it off for a bit longer than it should have been, yeah?
So, this is going to get really confusing, but after doing a LOT of research with Potter Wikis and such, I don't honestly even have the ages correct in this story, but I'm obviously not changing them for this story. Though, in a future next gen I'm writing it will be more up to date, so I hope no one will get too confused. THOUGH, I always imagined James as a bit older than Al. I didn't think they were too terribly close in the epilogue. That's just not how I saw them. Lily and Al were a lot closer than I thought the brothers were. Al is thirteen, and he is a third year, I just think he's mature because his brother isn't (though he has his fun moments) and he's the oddball. Everyone watches him as if there's something different about him. Harry, after all, was very mature for his age.
Thank you so much for coming by, reading, and reviewing! :D I'm so glad that you are liking it! I've feared that this story wasn't where I actually thought it was with story and characters with it's lack of love on every site I have it on. Your reviews really make my day! :D Thank you so much! Will definitely re-request!