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Review:teh tarik says:
Elphaba, this is an amazing chapter! (Sorry I took aaages to come back...) It's just packed with excitement and action and yet your characterisation is phenomenal (I loved the parts with Snape in them so much; you've pinned him down perfectly) and things are just generally getting more intriguing. This was a really long chapter (~5700 words), and it's 2.30am , and usually this would have felt like a long tiring read for me. But gah, your writing is so terrific and your pacing was superb that I just reached the end in no time at all.

And yeah, as mentioned earlier, I love your characters. Snape, Dumbledore, Remus, Clio and her friends...everyone. Everyone has such a clear characteristic voice, and even though you have many characters in this chapter, they were easy to differentiate; they were all so well-drawn out.

"Remus," Dumbledore said, breaking into his dark thoughts. "If you're going to be acting on Professor Callimachus's behalf, then please consider whether she'd approve of your actions." This line of Dumbledore's just made me grin. This is perfect Dumbledore.

I loved Snape's characterisation; he's his good old canon self, sneering and condescending when faced with the Death Eaters, and when witnessing Clio's vulnerable moment when the tear falls - he snaps into his icy, detached and unsentimental self, refusing to accept any credit for finding her and retrieving her wand, instead ascribing it all to Dumbledore. And how awesome was he, sneaking Veritaserum into the Death Eaters' drinks :DD Oh, and the "peace offering" to Remus. Goah, that was just wonderful. And I can't believe Rowle's thickness to actually go around screaming that he's "soiled" the reckless American friend...that really made me laugh.

I love the Remus bit as well. Poor Remus - he comes off as somewhat miserable and alone, and it's completely understandable, given the fact that he had to resign from a job that he loved and is pretty much unemployable now. I love the way him and Sirius were living together, probably keeping each other company - I don't know if this was mentioned anywhere in the books, but it really does make sense, the two of them. After all, they've both been through a great deal.

Anyway, I'm going to wrap this review up because I really need some sleep :P I'm so glad I came back to this! Your writing is wonderful as always, and this chapter was fabulous. Will be back for more soon ♥

-teh

Author's Response: Hey Teh, thanks so much for your kind review. :) I had a lot of fun writing this chapter, especially Snape's sections, so it's great to hear that you enjoyed it as well.

Rowle was fun, too -- I needed a dangerous but not very bright Death Eater to make the scenario in my head work, and the way he's described in the books seemed to fit.

Remus and Sirius's living situation sprung from a single line near the end of Goblet of Fire, when Dumbledore tells Sirius to, "lay low at Lupin's for a while." I extrapolated backwards from there. I imagined that Remus probably never lives in one place for very long, so the place where he'll be living at the end of this story won't be the same as where he started out. I thought it would be natural for the two of them to keep each other company when they can -- Sirius can help to control Remus while he's transformed, and Remus can help to keep Sirius out of trouble the other days of the month. :)

I've been very slow about revising the rough versions of the chapters I've yet to post, and your review has helped to motivate me to get back to work. Thanks for the support!

-Elphaba


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