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Review:STG Sagmag says:
Hey, STG Sagmag here with your review :D

Tonks's voice is funny and sarcastic, but it also has this kind of mature, grown up tone to it, which I think is pretty great. I love that she's besties with Charlie too, who has got to be my third favorite Weasley :) I also like how you've managed to bring in little things, little tidbits about Tonks and her lifestyle from how JKR wrote her.

There were a few grammatical errors, but none that really matter. Something that I'd like to know is whether Tonks has heard of Remus before. She refers to him as "this Remus guy" in her head, like she doesn't know him yet, but calls him Lupin aloud. Sirius himself only called him Remus, so how did Tonks know?

Overall, this was a very well-written chapter (I sniggered like a demented beaver when Sirius asked Tonks whether she was checking Remus out xD) and even though there's not much of a plot at the moment, it has a lot of potential and I'd really like to see the next chapter.

Feel free to re-request for chapter 2 :)
xSara

Author's Response: Hey Sara!

I'm so glad that you liked Tonks' voice, as it's so unique I really tried hard to capture it! It seemed natural that they would be friends as they're natures are so similar it seemed like the only likely option. I enjoyed slipping in the little about her life as it was so much fun :D

Ooh I'll review those grammar errors, they are always some left no matter how many times I look at the chapter :/ Oops I didn't realise that about Remus, I'll go and review that too!

Don't worry about laughing at that point, I laughed stupidly too :P Yeah this was more of an intro chapter than a plot one but I'm glad you saw some potential :D

Thank you for a great review, and I will definitely be re-requesting!

-Kiana


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