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Review:-BookDinosaur- says:
Hi, -BookDinosaur- here with your much-too-late review! I'm sorry!

I liked your characterisation of Harry-he and his actions were all very canon, and the brief descriptions of what Ron and Hermione were up to were also very believable, so well done on that.

I appreciated all the detail you put into this chapter-'Not from his fly-away hair to the ratty trainers he wore.' I felt like I could really see him in my mind.

Your area of concern was whether there was enough setting/description to offset the dialogue. I feel like you did fine with that, if anything, I think it is the other way round-there was a lot of description and not a lot of dialogue. Right now it's fine, but just be careful not too put in too much description-people do get bored of it.

Also, I would just like to say that your grammar and spelling was flawless, so congratulations on that.

Onto the next chapter (soon)!

-BookDinosaur-

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

This chapter did focus a little more on description and Harry reviewing what had happened so far. The dialogue picks up in the next chapter. I do want to make sure I have a good balance between dialogue and description.

I have been trying to keep the characters themselves as canon as possible.

Thank you very much!


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