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Review:patronus_charm says:
Ok I think I was a little too excited to this was a Petunia-centric chapter. I always found her a truly fascinating character due to her relationship with Lily and how she treated Harry so I was really excited :D

I really loved how you started the chapter with newspaper clippings, Iíve never really seen that done before but it was a really interesting technique. I liked how it provided a fresh perspective over what had been happening recently through someone elseís eyes and that really changed the dynamic of it all.

I think another I really liked about them was the content of them. It showed that the wizarding world was still a sharply changing landscape and you really canít predict what may be happening next. I think one which showed this idea the most was the one about the centaur uprisings and that Bane had been killed as it was so shocking as they had held an inferior position for them for so long and then to see them challenging it was great.

I think it was a really great idea to start with the same line as JK did about how the Dursleys were normal and how they were just like everyone else, as that was the start of the Harry Potter series whereas this seems to be the start of the next gen era. I really liked the inclusion of the detail about their time in hiding as it added a humorous element to the story.

The part where Petunia was thinking about both the Lilys was really powerful. I always wondered how she viewed Lily II and I think you conveyed her thoughts perfectly. She was bitter over at, yet at the same time you can sense how she still loved Lily I and perhaps loved Lily II too. Her characterisation really was excellent and the idea of Moony the dog was also a great.

This was a really wonderful short story collection and it showed a realistic idea of what may have happened after the war through minor characterís perspective which added a certain level of freshness to it. Iím so glad that I came back and read the final two chapters :D

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hello again, I was so excited to see that you reviewed both chapters!! :) I was a little uncertain of how they turned out, so getting this feedback is really great.

I'm glad you liked the newspaper clippings style, I felt like this chapter was a little out of place with the others and needed a way to tie them all together, so again it's great to know that it worked out alright.

I wanted to show in this story how the wizarding world has changed and how not everything has been fine and peaceful since Voldy's death. The tension with the centaurs seemed to build throughout the HP books, and it felt right that they would stand up for themselves at last. :)

Yay, I'm glad you felt like this both returned to the beginning of HP and signalled the next generation, as that's exactly what I wanted to convey! I wanted to give Petunia a little bit of redemption, but also to show how some things, like the Dursleys, stay pretty much the same even though years have passed and so much has happened in Britain right under their noses.

I'm glad you liked Petunia and her thoughts about the Lilys! I thought that while Harry kind of symbolized her conflicted jealousy and grief for Lily I, seeing herself and her sister in a little girl could have been an emotional moment for her. It was fun to imagine and play around with, anyway. :)

Thank you for such lovely reviews and for giving this thoughtful feedback. They were so great to read, and I'm really thrilled that you enjoyed the story and thought it was fresh. So, thank you!!! :D


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