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Review:patronus_charm says:
I really enjoyed the first three chapters so I thought I would come by and check out the final two. Iíve actually been meaning to for a while, but I kept on forgetting. Oh well, Iím here now :P

I remember you posting on the forums about Stanís accent and I thought it was done really well. It was neither over or understated and perfectly captured his accent. I found it so hard at times to know where to change peopleís dialect and what extent to do it to, but you clearly had no issue with it here. You also used vocabulary appropriate to him too, which was a really nice addition to the story.

You managed to make Stan appear as a sympathetic character which is unexpected to say the least, as he always irritated me in the books. I think it was the line about him not seeing his reflection in over a year, as that was really shocking. Itís the sort of thing you see every day so it showed how horrible his experience in Azkaban must have been.

I really liked that we got to find out about what happened to Nott as it was a nice way to tie in the overall story. As well doing a great job with Stanís characterisation, you also did an excellent one with Umbridge with all her little Ďhmm hmmingí it was really great, as she is a hard character to pull off and Iíve only tackled her in a parody as anything goes then.

I didnít anticipate the twist at the end, but I really loved it. I can imagine that the Death Eater court cases must have been tense places and you managed to convey that well, so now Iíve seen that scene it almost makes think that fights and uprisings during them should be expected.

I think I only found off was that I thought Umbridge was sentenced to Azkaban too for her crimes against muggleborns so I was bit surprised to find her there. But that was a really minor thing.

Anyhow that was a really great chapter and Iím off to the next!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hello! Is this one of the spontaneous reviews you were blogging about on the forums? If so, I absolutely loved it, it was such a nice surprise! :D

I'm glad you thought the accent worked out well, I played around with it a lot. I wanted to give it an authentic and believable touch while still being readable and getting the message of the chapter across, so it's really great to hear that it was effective. I really liked writing Stan, although I felt quite sad for him! He doesn't really know what's going on, and is definitely one of the people who suffers most from the war whether he was really innocent or not.

I'm glad you liked the portrayal of Umbridge! I kind of knew vaguely that she was supposed to have been sent off to prison, but thought she would make a good addition to the court scene and the unfairness of the whole situation. I'm thinking of adding a quick explanation that she managed to maneuver her way back into power, which I think is something that would happen in the injustice of the world which poor Stan inhabits. :(

Thank you so much for this wonderful review, and such a lovely and thoughtful one was well!! You're awesome!! :)



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