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Review:WeasleyTwins says:
Hello Amanda!

Another fabulous chapter! I'm running of out things to say, my dear - I've got no CC, no suggestions, nothing but praise and admiration and giddy fangirlish screaming.

You know, I don't know how I'm going to like Venn. He seems like a nice enough young man, but there's something about him - something possessive and controlling. Perhaps I'm imagining things and you've actually characterized him as sweet which means I've missed the entire point. We all want to be adored and be the center of attention, but he seems rather self-absorbed. And what he thinks of women? Rather like they're showpieces, but then I forget what era we're in (ahh, the feminist in me comes out!). Well, despite my sort-of, maybe, kind of dislike of him, I still think you are doing a fabulous job on his characterization. Everything is consistent and you slowly reveal more and more, as any wonderful novel should.

I can't wait until we see them together - I want Helena to show him that she's not just a pretty face, but is intelligent and has had an education and is somewhat independent.

Don't be alarmed by my dislike of Venn - it's just me trying to figure him out and what's going to come from all of this. Your story is impeccable. I can tell you're really getting into the groove with this story the further I read - you're becoming more comfortable, I think, and it is starting show.

As always, so wonderful. I should be writing, but this is a much better way to spend half an hour! :)

Shelby

Author's Response: Well, thank you! :D

Please, no need to apologize! You're not really supposed to like Venn at this point. He'll hit his stride a little later in the story. He's still really stubborn and selfish and juvenile, with these little hints that there could be a real human under there (such as the idea of his father's jacket being too burdensome for him). He clearly has a lot to learn yet about how to treat others and what is really important in life, and only time will tell if he really does learn those things. To make a long story short, if you find yourself sort of repulsed by him at this point, that means that I characterized him exactly as I meant to :)

You'll get to see Helena and Venn interact in the next chapter, and I can't wait to see what you think. Let's just say that he's met his match in many ways.

Thanks for this fantastic review, Shelby!

-Amanda


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