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Review:ohmymerlin says:
Hello! I would have reviewed sooner but I accidentally forgot I was meant to read and review this but I'm here now so no harm done! :D

This was... interesting. I love the way you write Barty, you're very talented at that! I also loved the way you wrote Bellatrix. So sinister! :D

I also love your imagery. It's a definite strong point of yours! (teach me pls) It was so chilling some of the sentences you used omfg.

The only thing that I think could have been better is the dialogue. I just feel it's very... clunky? I'm not too sure how to word it, but whenever I struggle with it (aka 100% of the time :p), I just read it out loud to see if I (or my character) would talk like that.

But other than that, I loved it! I love all your work, Pearl! It's always so amazing and just iedhgdkiefdk ♥

So yeah, I just loved this! And it's a definite 10/10! :D

Author's Response: Kayla! It's always a pleasure getting reviews from you, you're so wonderful! :)

First, I'll answer your CC. You aren't the first to have pointed out my flaw in character dialogue, and I think I understand where you're coming from when you say "clunky". I'll definately be more careful when writting out what my characters say. Dialogue, I'll admit, is one of my biggest weaknesses in writing, and something I do need to work on.

As for Barty and Bellatrix, I love them both dearly, and I'm pleased that you liked the way I wrote them. I tried to get Bellatrix as insane as I can get her, and in a way I'm pleased, but at the same time I wished I could make her darker. I tried twice, but validation rejections sort of kept me from doing so. I understand of course, the reasons why, but still...

Thank you so much dearie for your review! You're always so sweet.


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