So Iím finally caught up Ė yay, and itís a beautiful chapter image again :í)
I liked the scene with Minerva and Alastor a lot. Even though she becomes head of Gryffindor and ends up fighting against Voldemort, it made sense that she wouldnít want to go and fight in the war. Even though her brotherís death hasnít been the main focus of the story, whenever itís touched upon she still closes up and shows that she hasnít fully recovered from it.
I liked how you made Moody philosophical in this chapter, it suited his character. Even though he appears to be a gruff man on the outside, he must have a lot of intelligence to be such a successful Auror. I liked that he could understand Minervaís decision and didnít have a go at her for not fighting, as some would expect him to do. It echoes the softness of his and Tonksí relationship and shows that he does have a heart and he can understand each personís decision.
Riddleís characters beginning to change in a worrying with other peopleís observations about him. I suppose the mention of the Restricted Section may be a hint that heís begun his research into horcruxes. I canít remember the exact time he killed his father and grandparents but it would make sense for him to be starting around now.
I view Ravenclaw as possibly the least united house at all of them due to the rivalry as to who can excel most, but I think it was right to show them as a united force in the face of Myrtleís death. That was reflected when the third year girls were clamouring to tell Grimm what had happened. Admittedly, I may have forgotten that Myrtle comes back as a ghost, and just assumed she was dead, even though sheís one of my favourite ghosts in Hogwarts. I suppose itís because in her ghostly form she has more confidence due to others, possibly, viewing her with fear.
I liked the subtle hints in this chapter about the basilisk and the chamber of secrets; it showed how easily rumours can be dismissed, and how easily Hagrid became the scapegoat for it all. It would be interesting to see McGonagallís perspective during the CoS considering she was there for the last reopening and experienced someone she knew die.
I can understand Myrtleís reaction and her refusal to talk to other people. I think Grimm needs to view it from her perspective, as I doubt most people anticipate turning into a ghost once theyíve died. Minerva seemed to understand the dilemma a little more than Grimm, but then she tends to be more composed in situations like these so itís not surprising she acted in that way.
That last section was really great. I liked the brief scene with Hagrid, as I have been wondering how heís been coping with all of this. Iím dreading the scene when Riddle blames him and Hagrid gets thrown out of the castle, as heís probably one of the most genuine characters and doesnít intentionally cause harm.
I thought I recognised that line from Dumbledore, and it really fits with the chapter title and how everything is finally coming together, and it is the endgame for Hagrid and possibly for Minerva and Grimm depending on what Grimm decides to do. I liked that Myrtle got an appearance too, as she appeared to be really relishing the fact she had been brought back to life. Youíve left me on a cliff-hanger though, as to where the scream came from. I guess it could be someone being petrified, or relate to Hagrid or something entirely different.
That was an excellent chapter, and Iím now eagerly awaiting the next one :D
Author's Response: Thank you again for reading and reviewing, Kiana! It's fantastic to see that you've reached the latest chapter - it's gotten to be such a long story that I'm pleased when someone can get this far. It means a lot that you've taken the time to read and review each chapter, especially in such detail! :D
Minerva will only fight when there's no other choice - in the war against Voldemort, she sees no choice but to fight. Yet I won't say that WWII is any less serious - it's further away, but it still personally affects Minerva. Perhaps what changes is that the adult Minerva has more responsibility - she wants to protect the students of Hogwarts and prevent them from suffering - whereas during WWII, she's still only 17. Her perspective shifts with age.
I think it's important to portray the younger Moody in a way that emphasizes the strengths that made him into the best of Aurors - from what I remember in the books, this requires an equal measure of physical endurance, magical powers, and intelligence. It's too easy to write him off as Mad-Eye, but his paranoia later in life has a very serious side to it - what has he actually seen and done as an Auror? What kind of traumas has he survived? It's also true that he has a strange respect for the people he gets close to, like Tonks, the Longbottoms, and Harry. He's one of those rare people who places ability before other things - it doesn't matter to him whether a character is male or female, Muggleborn or pureblood, as long as they can do the job and do it well. Minerva has the talent to be an Auror or fighter, but she wants to use her talents elsewhere, and Moody respects that, probably more than most other characters in the story do.
You're right about Ravenclaw, and it was wonderful to finally look inside the house and meet its people, who we really haven't seen apart from Grimm and Myrtle (but then again when do we see Ravenclaws in the books? Cho is peripheral at best, leaving us with Luna, who is an outcast even among the Ravenclaws... it's a strange house indeed). Currently Myrtle is in a transition state between dead and ghost - her desire for revenge is driving her back into the land of the living. And yes, she's suddenly realizing how much more freedom she has as a ghost - people's reactions are only fuelling her confidence because finally she is able to have power over others.
Haha, now you're making me want to write a one-shot from Minerva's point of view during CoS. :P I probably won't ever get to doing it, but it would be a fun exercise, just to explore her thoughts during that period, both her renewed fears and her realization of the truth.
I've been debating whether to depict the scene when Hagrid is expelled - it would be dramatic and painful, and I'm not even sure if Grimm or Minerva would be allowed to be present for it. The next chapter will be a tricky one to write and I'm not really looking forward to it. *hides*
Thank you again for your review! I've enjoyed reading and responding to each of them! ^_^