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Review:nott theodore says:
This was a great one-shot!

This was a really interesting take on Snape's character, and I liked the way that you wove in Rasputin's story as well. One of the things that I enjoy in the series is the hints that famous historical figures might have been magical, so I thought this linked in well with the books. There are lots of parallels you can draw between their lives, and that made it a very interesting read.

There was something about Snape's reaction to his father that rang very true. And I think that it could explain why he hates muggles, too. If he has been persecuted to some extent by his father because of being magical, it's very plausible that he would grow to hate muggles and believe that wizards were inherently better. It also makes sense that he would feel disdain towards his mother for lowering her standards and exposing him to such a cruel father. I've never really thought of him having those prejudices at such a young age, but it worked here.

I actually found myself really feeling for Snape in this story, despite the fact that one of the main emotions he feels is hatred. But I thought that his feelings for Lily worked well, especially in the first section when he never named her but spoke about her as if she was sacred. The way that he didn't want his mother dirtying the pure places that Lily frequented.

It was quite strange to think that Snape was glad, in a way, to lose Lily's friendship, but his logic behind that was easy to follow. I could also understand why he hated James and Harry so much, because he saw them both as reasons for Lily's death.

There were just a few mistakes that I picked up on:
"Christmas at the Snapes" -- Snapes'
"That is no way to ever speak to someone in an advantaged position than you." -- more advantaged
"Her marriage to a Muggle had warranted in, an albeit small, announcement in The Daily Prophet." -- you don't need the first 'in' here

Apart from those small errors, I thought that your characterisation was really good in what is actually quite a short story.

Overall, I really enjoyed this one-shot. It definitely hit the spot!

Sian :)

Author's Response: I'm really glad that you found the connection with Rasputin understandable, and that Snape's prejudice towards Muggles can possibly come from an early age. I always felt that Snape's hatred had to come from somewhere so where better than from his family? I think that is what was amazing about Harry, the fact that he grew up with such horrid Muggles but he was so good of a person, ya know? I definitely wanted to portray Snape's feelings for Lily in a different way than they have been portrayed before because he DID choose the dark arts over Lily so there had to be a reason, but the fact that Snape always loved Lily contradicts his actions earlier on.

I will definitely change the mistakes! Thanks for pointing it out!

And thanks for your WONDERFUL review! I'm glad you enjoyed it!


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