Wow thatís a really haunting chapter image; itís making me wonder what on earth could happen in this chapter to cause Minerva to look like that.
I think the parts of the chapter when we get a glimpse of the thiefís perspective and learn more about his background are fast becoming my favourite parts. I think itís because of their effectiveness. You only say a little in them, yet they convey so much and itís really surprising. Though the only annoying thing about them is that it increases my desire to know whoís behind the stealing even more.
I really loved that scene when Minerva was confronting Walburga and Avery. It was great they you weaved even more canon characters, as itís always interesting to have a story behind people you know. I always found the pureblood families and their society fascinating to read, so I really enjoyed getting a flicker of it here.
I liked how even though they are Slytherins you added a humane touch to them to show that they do feel love, and have to suffer the consequences of it. I think the situation you created with Walburga not truly loving the person she is meant really great as it reflected Siriusí views of his parentsí relationship and it tied in perfectly with canon.
And we get another scene with the still unknown people. From the way they interacted with one another I think it may be Tom and Dolores. It would fit both of their personalities, and I can imagine that Umbridge would have this warped belief that this would separate Grimm from Minerva, and then she could then date him. I suppose youíre not going to tell me whether my assumptions are correct or not, so Iíll have to wait and see.
Hagridís accent was great, and I could just imagine his voice in my head. I suppose he was in the dungeons seeing Aragog, which must only mean that the attack on Myrtle must be coming up soon. Iíll be sad to see her die, as Iíve really grown attached to her throughout this story. Ah I was right! So Myrtle was the once-thief, I never saw that coming, but it makes it even more exciting due to the unpredictable nature of the book. I can fully well understand how terrible Myrtleís life must have been at Hogwarts with that bullying scene with Olive; it sort of justifies her actions for doing what she did.
Wow is all I can really say for that last scene. There were so many emotions ranging from guilt to love and it was simply wonderful. Even though I knew what Dumbledore was going to say to Minerva I still felt tense and afraid for her, in case of it being something much worse. The way Dumbledore told Minerva what had happened definitely suited him. He had the sorrow for the student dying, then the anger that he failed to do anything to prevent it from happening.
Minervaís and Tiberiusí reactions were exactly how I imagined them to be. They, too, felt guilt about it and if they found out what circumstances led her to be in that bathroom at that time; they would probably feel it even more due to them failing to prevent Oliveís teasing. I think it was right that something as monumental as this would bring them together, as theyíre both such stubborn characters and, therefore, couldnít give in unless it was something like this.
Another excellent chapter and I canít wait to see how their investigations further!
Author's Response: Thank you again for taking the time to read and review each chapter of this novel! I apologize for taking so long to get to all of your responses - I appreciate every review you've left. *hugs*
It's great to hear that those little sections from the thief's perspective are so effective and revealing about their character. It provides a sort of internal monologue that isn't captured by the main narration of the story, which is more focused on Grimm and Minerva's perspective. I didn't want those sections to reveal their identity, and I'm actually glad that this lack of certainty is rather annoying. :P The suspense is important, especially in this chapter and those that follow.
The pureblood families and their politics is also fascinating to me. I don't know why - I suppose it's the same kind of fascination I have for the history of royal families and how closely intertwined they are. The Black family is an especially interesting one because of its connections to all other wizarding families - they're definitely the aristocrats of the wizarding world, with a level of power that's by Harry's time, passed over to the Malfoys. It was a bit of a risk to manipulate canon, but I often wonder how many of those marriages among purebloods were done for purely political reasons - to keep the money in the family, or to grow the family's fortune/power. Walburgha is, perhaps, a lesser Black cousin, and she had to marry Orion in order to maintain her and her family's social position. She has a strong personality, as the portrait reveals, but there's also a lot of bitterness and anger in her, as though she blames Muggles and Muggleborns for her family's downfall. I wonder how much this mirrors what occurred in Germany before WWII, and how some Germans blamed the Jews for the economic crisis - there's the possibility that their fortune was lost even before Regulus's death. Did they give all their money to support Voldemort? Or were they already on the edge of genteel poverty? There's so much one could do to expand the history of the wizarding world, things that are only hinted at in canon.
Hagrid's accent is always a challenge, since I don't want to mock him at all, but I still want to capture his voice accurately - it's part of his identity. I'm really glad that it sounds like him - it helps to have seen the films enough times to get a good idea of the sounds. :D
Myrtle's place in this aspect of the plot is still something I'm not entirely happy about. It feels a bit of stretch, perhaps because she's stayed so much on the sidelines of the story, appearing here and there. But the fact that she's often ignored by Grimm makes things make more sense - he has literally lost sight of her, and so she falls into the grasp of his opposite: Riddle. (Now that I think of it, Grimm and Minerva are mirrored by Riddle and Umbridge - they are so much the same, yet so different.) Myrtle has definitely lived an unpleasant life, and things only get worse for her at school - she doesn't belong anywhere. It's sad that, in the books, the tragedy of her story - the bullied girl who dies needlessly - is undermined by JKR's portrayal of Moaning Myrtle as a whining annoyance. It's hard to feel sympathy for her, even when we know her history, because she's made into a comic figure - it's strange because Harry usually feels a strong affinity with other victims of bullying. I think this is why I place a lot of emphasis on Grimm's guilt, Minerva's horror, and Dumbledore's anger - perhaps they could have prevented this, perhaps they could have made a difference, but they didn't, and now they're living with the consequences. It's a life-changing moment for all of them, including Riddle.
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