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Review:Lululuna says:
This was simply beautiful!!! I loved the nostalgic, loving and eloquent tone of Hermione's voice, it reads almost like a lullaby. You have a very lovely style of description that flowed so naturally, and it was a pleasure to read. The use of long, flowing sentences to represent the continuation and drawn out birth mixed with short sentences really pacts impact and sets up the story so nicely.

"The hours I spent holding you, rocking you, singing you to sleep in my arms and yet I still could not decide what name to give you, how to name the mystical rain child that slipped into our lives one dark November day. Your dark blue eyes stared accusingly up at me- what name could be good enough for such a being? What name did justice to the half-moon dimples in your cheeks? To the growing amount of sunlit hair, which I could already tell would one day be just as bushy as mine had always been?"

This, was truly lovely. The adoration and fascination Hermione has with her daughter really comes across, and I loved how she found characteristics of herself-like her hair-in her child. I think that the wonder of the whole experience really seems believable for a parent with their firstborn.

I'm glad that Hermione's mother got to redeem herself as a namer of babies by coming up with the name Rose. ("Hermione?" Really, Mrs. Granger?) The details about Hermione's parents feeling a little out of place in the magical world fit very well with my idea of them in canon, as well. :)

The last two paragraphs were stunning as well. They summed up the whole lovely little story so well, and made me feel rather nostalgic! "The world will take what it can from you, but those moments, Rose, those moments will always be ours." Simply beautiful. You should be really proud of your writing in this story, I absolutely adored it! :)

Author's Response: Hello!

Aww thankyou so much for such a fantastic review!
I love your comment about it sounding like a lullaby... I sort of imagine Hermione telling it all to Rose one day and that idea fits beautifully with that :)

Ahh I'm glad you liked that quote, and that Hermione's fascination comes across... I really enjoyed putting in the little similarities between Rose and her parents, so it's good that you picked up on that! It's wonderful to hear that she seems believable as a parent with a firstborn, as I don't have any children (yet!) so bringing across that emotion was something I was quite nervous about!

Haha yeah, I'm not sure Mrs Granger will ever live down naming her daughter Hermione! I'm very glad that you liked the way Hermione's parents were presented, and that their discomfort in the magical world seemed to fit well... They get very sidelined in the books, but I imagined that they would want to be included in their granddaughter's life :)

It's great to hear that you liked the last line (it was probably the bit of this I was happiest with.)
Thankyou, thankyou for such a sweet, lovely review! It made me so happy, and put a great big smile on my face!

-Bethany


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