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Review:marauder5 says:
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Wow, this was such a beautiful and poetic description of a mother's love for her little girl. You have definitely captured it well, it was extremely touching with beautiful descriptions throughout, and Hermione's deep love for Rose was evident all the way through the story. I love the fact that it's directed towards Rose; it adds a uniqueness to it, and it's quite hard to write like that, so congratulations on succeeding! I do not have any children myself, so who am I really to say it, but I still found it very believable, and I hope I'll have a little girl one day so I can experience this ;) I also really liked the fact that Hermione's parents couldn't come up with a name for her either. That comment: "And then you came up with Hermione?" made me laugh :D

I'd like to comment on just one thing though. Since this story is written from Hermione's POV to Rose, I think it would fit better if you didn't refer to Ron as Ron but as Dad, to Molly as Grandma Molly and Ginny as Aunt Ginny, etc. I think it would fit better, but of course, it's up to you! :)

Brilliant job on this! I was very moved by it, and it really just made me want to run over to my own mum and hug her and tell her how much I love her, haha! ;)

Author's Response: Hey there!

Thank you so much for such a wonderful review! I'm glad that Hermione's love for her daughter came through so well, as that's basically what drives this. Honestly, the second person narrative thing happened completely by accident- I liked the idea though, that Hermione might be telling all this to Rose one day...

I don't actually have kids either haha, so I'm glad that it sounded believable! I always think that Hermione's parents are somewhat sidelined in the books, but I think that they would definitely have wanted to be part of their granddaughter's life. And I'm glad you liked the line about Hermione's name! ;)

Hmmm, yeah that is a very good point about referring to the characters as Rose would see them. You're right, it would fit much better- I'll go and edit when I get the chance!

Thanks again for such a lovely, kind, helpful review! It's amazing to hear that you were moved by it... And yeah- mums are great! :P

-Bethany


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