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Review:Maelody says:
Hiya! OK, so just a quick out of the way error review first: This chapter seemed to lack a bit of a look-through compared to the other one. There were missing commas, possessive apostrophes, a few misspellings, and a couple words that needed to be capitalized. Other than that, I like Horatio, and the goodbye between Louis and his parents was really nice. His sisters seem to get along with him well, which is a different take on the two girls than I've seen yet, so good job on that! :)

Yeah, the Freya vibe isn't disappearing yet. Hmm, maybe it's just because I get slightly upset at people who don't take up for their own responsibility? Typically I get upset with the males of stories like this, but that could be because normally this situation is in reverse character. So, I would safely presume this is a good and natural feeling for me to have! Considering I can't read into Freya's thoughts.

To be completely honest, I'm not a big fan of Horatio's name either, but that just has to do with the way I pronounce it when I say it out loud. It sounds so unnatural coming out of my mouth lol! I like the character though. I can tell he's going to be the comic relief of the story. Though Louis has his fair share of snappy one-liners at him. :)

I liked the chapter, and I do hope that everything is alright with Freya, even if she isn't exactly my favorite person right now. Hopefully she'll get her behind to the Hospital Wing soon so that baby can be nice and healthy when it comes out! :)

Author's Response: Hey! Er... yeah, I need to go back and check over my story. I'm normally writing it in the early hours of the morning and just tend to post it. I will go back over it at some point though and correct things. :p

I'm glad that you like Horatio, and I wanted Dom and Vic to have a close sister relationship, as I don't think that all sisters are fighting all the time. I know that I hardly fight with mine.

Ah the Freya vibe, it's cool. You can still dislike her. :D She's not behaving very nicely at the moment.

Oh really? That's okay, as long as you like the character. :P Hopefully the name will grow on you over the chapters. Louis and Horatio are going to be having a bromance going on. :P

I'm so glad that you liked this chapter, even if Freya isn't your favourite person right now.
Thanks for reading and reviewing! :D

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