Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:ShadowRose says:
Tag!

Wow. I'm in awe. Your descriptions are amazing. Everything is so clear throughout, that I feel like I'm actually there in the scene. Your writing style is just so eloquent and amazing.

I like that Thanatos Nott has at least some human qualities to him, especially as seen in the flashback to when his son was younger. I just felt so much pain for him, even though he actually was the bad guy. But every villain has at least some goodness to them, and I like how you capitalized on that here.

Also, it was interesting to get into the mind of a Death Eater, especially him specifically. It seems as though he was probably raised with the ideals that a pureblood society was truly superior, and the mixing of Muggle blood was a sin of itself. He almost viewed himself as "good." I love how he calls himself a revolutionary, because when you think about it, that's what Voldemort and his followers were, although not necessarily the revolutionaries that produce positive change.

Also, Tonks. Wow. You did an excellent job in capturing her emotions, and all that anger that was built up as a result of the grief she felt. Everything she expressed was just so raw and open, that I couldn't help but sympathize with her.

This sentence - "Perhaps they shall simply execute us, a generation lost to the Dark Arts, rows of pureblood bodies lined up like fallen soldiers, corpses to be desecrated and disposed of like Plague victims, thrown in a dirty pit of the commons." - was just so powerful. I mean, wow.

There are a couple spots where you use American spellings of words like "behavior" instead of adding the "ou" which is seen in British spelling. It's not a big deal, but it's nice for the sake of geographical accuracy. :)

Overall, this was a completely brilliant portrayal of a Death Eater's inner thoughts. I can't wait to read the next chapters!

-ShadowRose (Taylor)

Author's Response: Hello!

Wow, thank you so much for this really lovely review, it made my day! :) The compliments on the writing style really mean a lot to me.

I'm glad you liked Nott, and the multiple sides to his character. He's a terrible person, but not entirely without some redemption, and he's definitely conflicted even if he didn't admit it to himself. It's great to hear that you felt for him, despite him being a villain. :) You're certainly right, he does seen himself as doing the right thing, and a revolutionary in his own mind. Getting into Nott's head was really fun for me!

I'm glad you liked Tonks as well! Adding her was a last-minute idea in this story, but I thought she could represent the pain and anger so many people were feeling.

Ah, thank you for pointing out the Americanisms, I'm always so confused about those! :P I'll change them when I edit the story.

Thank you for this really thoughtful and kind review!!! :)


Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 742
Submit Report: