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Review:ShadowRose says:
I'm back for the final review of the three!

Hearing Liam's banter with his dad was quite funny. In the last chapter, Liam didn't really seem all that interesting, mainly because he really didn't have much of a personality to him. In this chapter, however, you really develop him with his annoyance with his dad, and - if my intuition is correct - slight crush on Talia.

Speaking of Talia, this chapter deepens her characterization a lot too. Last chapter, she's shown as being really caring about Charlotte, but that kind of gets thrown to the side once Holden got thrown into the mix. She's a little bit too involved with him, although I suppose that's probably what you intended to happen.

The DADA class was one of my favourite classroom scenes ever. The fact that Teddy was blending in with the students was just genius, both on his part and yours. That was fantastic. Also, after class, Teddy's line to Talia was fantastic as well.

I also loved the water scene between Charlotte and Al. It really does show that he helps balance her out, and calm her down, as she tends to be less anxious when he's around. Plus, they're just too cute.

It was interesting to see the family dynamics between all of the cousins. One thing I didn't like about this scene however, was all of the Houses being in parentheses throughout. While I do agree that it's important to be in there so that the reader knows that, the used of parentheses kind of throws off the original purpose of the sentence. Maybe if you could fit it into the actual sentence, or put it all in the author's note at the top, it might be a little easier for the section to be understood.

Another excellent chapter. Feel free to re-request for the next three when there's a slot open, I'd love to keep reviewing for you! :)

-ShadowRose (Taylor)

Author's Response: Oh no the final review :( Just kidding! I'm probably going to post in the thread again if something opens up!

I really loved writing this chapter and it's great to hear that you liked it! Developing the characters is really important to me so I really like that you picked up on it. Liam turns out not to just be the fun-loving best friend and Talia turns out to have a bit of a weakness when it comes to her boyfriend. Favorite classroom scenes ever?! I'm beaming. I really like writing Teddy and will probably do a bit of a prequel on him...sometime. He just seems like he would be a fantastic teacher to me. In some ways I think he'd be like his dad when he's teaching, but I also think that he's going to bring his own methods to the table.

I thought the story needed something light and fun so I threw in the water scene. It's good to know it was appreciated! A major part of the story is the way Al can calm her down and be exactly what she needs and I'm glad you're picking up on it.

I wrote this one so long ago that I'd totally forgotten I put the houses in parenthesis. Thank you so much for bringing it to my attention! I'm probably going to go back and fix that right now lol.

Thanks again and again and again!

-Avis12 (Sam)

I'd love it if you kept reviewing for me! I'll keep an eye on the topic!



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