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Review:Lululuna says:
Hi! Wow, this is such an intriguing beginning to a story. I'm totally hooked! The beginning scene was so tense and upsetting, and while beautifully written it certainly gave me goosebumps. I also liked how you moved straight into the court scene, hinting and setting up the context that still has much to be explored. And one of Harry's kids dies!!! I'm interested to find out which one, but I'm guessing that we won't find out until much farther on. Gah, suspense! :P

There's something very spooky about knowing a character is going to die before even getting to know them in a story. If making the reader desperate for more was your goal, it's certainly been achieved!

The idea of the tides changing and Muggleborns bullying and harming purebloods is really original, but makes sense in a tragic sort of way. I also noted that they were using guns, not wands, which was curious as well: perhaps an attempt to hold onto being Muggle instead of wizarding methods of violence? It does seem a bit far-fetched that the teachers at Hogwarts and other "adults" wouldn't be able to stop it, but then again this is a very dark version of Hogwarts that you've created. And I like it, it's something different! :)

I'm glad to see the issue of school shootings being addressed through fan fiction, it's certainly something very relevant to the times and I'm excited to see how you'll develop this. Can't wait to keep reading!!! :)

Author's Response: Hi there, thank you so much for your wonderful review! This made my day :)

I toyed around with how to write the first chapter SO many times and finally settled on this, so I'm really glad you liked it! I actually get a little sad sometimes when I'm writing because I know the ending haha. My main goal with this story was to be original and I've always wanted to write something dark.

As far as school shootings go, it is a very sensitive topic so I just hope that when the actual chapter of the shooting comes I do it tastefully. Thanks again for the review!

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