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Review:Cassius Alcinder says:
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I read through this a few times, and each time I noticed new layers. I can't really do it justice in a review, but there was such a poetic flow to the writing that manged to make such efficient use of every word.

These events were such a pivotal era in Dumbledore's life, and we only really got a brief description of them in the books. You really conveyed the whirlwind of emotions Dumbledore experienced, from being seduced by Grindelwald's vision of power, to watching his family be ripped apart, as well as realizing that Grindelwald was not the person he though he was and questioning everything he believes in.

The analogy of the albatross was well used, and while the thought of Dumbledore intentionally killing his sister may be a bit disconcerting, the overwhelming feeling of guilt and regret was very well captured.

On another note, the historian in me absolutely loves picturing young Dumbledore in the same Victorian setting as Holmes and Watson.

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! :D One thing I like about this 500 word challenge is the need to not only make every word count, but to include as much as possible within those words. I wasn't sure whether enough of the story had come through - I had so much in mind about the Dumbledores and Albus's interactions with Grindelwald that it seemed like there was no way of fitting it into this structure. It is, however, excellent to hear that it isn't the case, that the story still conveys as much as I hoped it would.

It's still up in the air whether Dumbledore purposely killed her or not. If he did, it was either because he believed he was doing her a favour or because he worried about what Grindelwald would do to her, how he would use her as propaganda. It doesn't make the act right in any way, but I wanted to put that possibility out there. There's too much left unsaid in the series - it's not even known whether Dumbledore feels guilt and regret because of Ariana's death or because he loved Grindelwald. An incredible amount of potential is lost in a single moment, and it's great to hear that this story managed to capture that effectively.

Thank you again for reading and reviewing this! It was fantastic to hear your feedback! :)

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