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Review:Bobby Dazzler says:
Hey hun, how're you going? :) I am so sorry that this review request is so overdue!!! I've had seemingly endless computer problems so now that they're - hopefully! - all fixed, I was finally able to play catch up on reviews, yay! :)

Ok, going on your items you would like me to talk about :)

Did the star theme work? Yes, I think it did. It both was a play on words and told the story of how Regulus' life was deteriorating very cleverly, without telling us how he was fading away physically or what he looked like, but rather portrayed through the stars which were a lot easier to envision and it flowed nicely from start to finish. Clever writing technique :)

How was Regulus' characterisation? Look, we don't know much of him from the books, compared to Sirius or Bellatrix etc, so you've got more creative licence. Having said that, I think you did a great job, drawing influence from what we know of his canon character as well as what life from his POV would've been like by turning Sirius' views of him upside down. I think you did a good job, and it tied in nicely again with the star theme :)

Was his thoughts of Sirius ok? Yea, I think so too. It wasn't overplayed, it was genuine heartfelt emotion from someone who knew he was in trouble and likely eiether going to die or be killed by either the Death Eaters or the Order, or live a terrifying life in Azkaban which he probably wouldn't have survived anyway, so he was thinking of his brother who chose the better path and yea... I think it was fine, I know what you were trying to achieve and you did it :)

I enjoyed this one a lot, it was simplistic and short but said a lot, and had a lot of powerful imagery. Couldn't find any spelling/grammar mistakes either, even better! :) Very enjoyable love, feel free to request another, Bobby xx

Author's Response: Haha don't worry about it! I've requested some reviews and they're still 6 months so this quick :P

I'm glad that you found the star theme worked, as I wasn't entirely sure if over did it. I thought that it would reflect the situation well, so I'm glad that you liked it :)

Yeah I think the lack of knowledge about him from the books is the thing which worries me the most, as I didn't want to go OTT with him. I'm glad that canon influences worked too, as it was fun to intertwine to them.

Ooh thank god his thoughts about Sirius weren't overplayed. I have habit of getting carried away at times, and I wanted this to appear genuine. Yay you got what I was getting at, which is even greater :)

I think this is the first one-shot without any spelling or grammar mistakes, as I always seem to miss them. Thanks for this great review it was really useful :)

-Kiana


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