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Review:marauder5 says:
I really liked this chapter! Stan is another character that we don't get to see that much of in the books, so it's definitely interesting to read about him! It also makes it even more impressive that you managed to capture the essence of his character so well, and I absolutely think that writing this in his accent adds to that and makes it even better. You found a very nice balance, there: if you had overdone the accent thing, it might have disrupted the flow and made it quite hard to understand (especially for someone like me, who's not a native English speaker!), but you've successfully avoided that and just added the perfect amount of accent into his thoughts. As a result, it was a really good touch that made this chapter stand out! :)

I think that the plot of this chapter is really good as well. It was great to get an insight on Stan's thoughts, and I really like the fact that you don't write it as if the Wizarding World automatically became perfect after Voldemort's death. The new guards of Azkaban is one example of that, and Stan's fate is another. It showed a darker version of this time than the ones I've read before!

This story is pure brilliance, and this chapter is not an exception. My only criticism would be the part about Umbridge. I realise that her involvement is vital for the actual plot, and that she represents the corrupt side of it all, but I really can't see that happening. Would they let her be Head Witch of Wizengamot? Never. I don't believe it. But it works well in this story, and I guess that everyone's head canon is different ;) Nonetheless, I am once again astonished by your writing skill, your talent with words and, like I've said before, they way you capture your characters' voices flawlessly. And you've put up another chapter already! I can't wait to read that one too! :)

Author's Response: Hi! Yay, I'm really happy you liked this chapter! I really loved writing it, but wasn't too sure about the final result. Especially with regards to the accent: it's great to hear that it didn't come across as too strong and that it contributed to the voice in the story. :)

I'm glad you liked the darkness of this chapter and of this story's portrayal of the wizarding world! Even though Stan is in a court of justice and is supposed to be getting a fair trial, the wizarding world is so corrupt and unfair to people like him who weren't powerful or influential.

That's such a good point about Umbridge! My idea was that she managed to sweet-talk, swindle and threaten her way back into power, which I can totally see her doing as she always seems to pick the winning side and employ questionable methods, and this would add to the unfairness and hypocrisy of the whole thing. I might add in a part to the story where an angry spectator calls out something about Umbridge's power manipulation to make it fit with canon a bit better! :)

Thank you so much for this lovely review, as always!!! :D You're just too awesome!!!


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