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Review:charlottetrips says:
Again you slay me!

You will have to forgive the briefness of this review as I am typing on a mobile, but I can squee for as much as I'm capable of typing!

The premise and execution of this one-shot is most effective. I'm gripped from the start with your summary. I love the way you give us outsiders' viewpoints on Bill and Fleur and slip neatly into Bill's side of things.

But Fleur was not of the air: she was earth and fire, a being made from the lifeblood of the soil, an imperfectly perfect person with strong opinions and a temper of towering ferocity.
What a beautiful description. This quote has probably been quoted in each of the reviews of this story but I don't care. I'm going to quote it again, and I have.

Anyway, the small moments that you allow the reader to peak in are simple yet so perfect to give us a glimpse of the happy life they led. It totally justifies Bill's complacency with her current attitude toward him.

How tragic that she no longer really recognizes him as her husband but she knew and she cared enough to try to help him through it as much as she could before the dementia took over.

This kind of reminded me of The Notebook by Nicholas Sparks but with that added awesomeness of beautiful description and Harry Potter characters.

xChar

Author's Response: Hello again! Oh, you are just too kind to me!! :)

I'm so happy to hear that you liked this story!!! Hearing that the story's structure: going from the nurse's POV to Bill's, was really great to get feedback on, and I'm glad that it worked. I rewrote the beginning so many times and knowing you liked it is very reassuring!

Aw, thank you! I loved that quote too, I had a clear picture of how Bill saw Fleur in my head and am glad it came across in print. :)

I'm really happy you pointed out Fleur's efforts to ease her transition into dementia for her husband, as I thought it said a lot about her personality. She's very caring, and she likes to be control, so descending into dementia would be so devastating for her.

It is a bit like the Notebook, isn't it? :)

Thank you so much for this really lovely and thoughtful review!!! :D


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